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Barefoot Trod
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Barefoot Trod |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Barefoot Trod Why does this day down the sky, the blue of it clouding the window with heat that takes frazzled thought and twists it until it drips truth? Tenderness lies hallowed beneath a willow somewhere touching a rosebud mouth and breathing perfumed air in the spending of illicit words. A cadence plays beneath the canopy and beckons the singer to dwell in harmony and cover its heaving mounded listening sighs with shaded grace, yet, the heat captures me in melt and I dangle under the sun waiting for dark truth to listen and answer me with the moon to magic all these clumping feelings into feathered beguile and jewel the meadow in soft so that barefoot I can trod across the depth of your ocean. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
**kicking off shoes** Martie...this is sooooooooo beautifully written...the flow and the imagery are exquisite!! Excellent work~ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"magic all these feelings into feathered beguile jewel the meadow in soft that barefoot I can trod across the depth of your ocean." says so much - with so little - truly beautiful Martie - you've such a way with words  |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
so that barefoot I can trod across the depth of your ocean. Big sigh. This was really great. ~Heather |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Martie I absolutely love this one.....  regards, sudhir |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Martie This poem is why I keep away from free verse as much as possible - the thoughts are so complex and perfectly stated - there is no way I could ever excell in this form - you intimidate the daylights out of me with the flowing, deep, complex way you write. Simply beautiful. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie~ I wish I could write like this and have it turn out half as good as yours.....this is wonderful.... -SEA |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, please read LJA's note above, and end it with my name. Your gift amazes me. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
what a trip, Martie ... a beautifully fresh trip ... thanks. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Butterflies--thanks for kicking of your shoes with me. Bill--Sometimes I feel that words ARE my way....thank you for such a nice comment. Heather--thanks for the sigh. Sudhir--Your words mean alot to me, thank you. LongJohn...I doubt if I could intimidate a flea...so thanks for this...makes me feel pretty powerful!! (PS...you could to write free verse) Sea--You write beautifully!! Claire--You know I feel the same way about you. MA--glad you came along... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie, my friend~ I'd have gotten to this one sooner, but I was tripping through the ocean. Nekkid as a jaybird and barefooted to boot ! You do it with such magic. Love it .... PERFECT ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I can vouch for Marge as I got the whole thing on tape...lol....wait til you see this one.  My boots are off and I have sand squishing between me toes and loving it much. Excellent write my friend and it tain't at all easy to get a cowboy to take his boots off.....so you have done well. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Ah, beautiful! Beautiful! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
If I could live my life barefooted, I'd do it... This is absolutely wonderful...  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
so that barefoot I can trod across the depth of your ocean. sigh.... sigh wonderful Martie. What more could I say? As usual? That suits too!!! K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh what a picture this brings to mind Martie. Simply beautiful! Bonnie |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
*Sigh* Beautiful Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I don't know about y'all, but I'd sure love to have Martie write my epitath! Lovely images, beautiful words, Martie! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge, I'm so glad to know that there is still a place where you can do this....I love your response and the poem you wrote..thank you for being so you!! Mark--You are wonderful, I can picture it all now...thank you for such a sweet response. Rosemary--thanks for the beautiful...I hope you have your computer back up and running! Nan--Me too... Kamla--whatever you say you always do it just right. Bonnie--thanks for the look and your kind words. Kethry--so glad to get a sigh and beautiful..thank you. Corinne--An epiteth...a wonderful compliment, but I hope one that I don't have to do... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"so that barefoot I can trod across the depth of your ocean." Ahhh...wonderful, as usual my friend...sigh.> jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 09-14-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi there JWesley...thank you so much for the sigh and especially the, my friend. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very beautiful. Martie Your spledid writing never fails to be superb Liz |
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