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The Clarion Calls (A sonnet - thanks to Nan)
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The Clarion Calls (A sonnet - thanks to Nan) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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Who has, for love, not forsaken it all? Spread wide new wings to soar in the heart's wind? Dashed plans to gain what they could lose again? Turned their back to the hearth to heed the call? Invited trumpets to sound at their wall? Followed the guidon to whatever and then Desperately wished they could comprehend, Why what they had lost was still worth the fall? Love's clarion calls for weary and lost, Its notes are undamped by window or door. The heart heeds the peel and answers alone. The treasure, you see, is well worth the cost, For what else is Heaven, if it's not for Lost spirits who seek to find their way home? [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 09-12-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Phew....this is amazing, haunting and beautiful. leaving me breathless here. "I have penned epitaphs on snow, and written my legacy in dust." self quote. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
LJ, you leave me breathless, without words for this beauty. except it left me "discombubulated." Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
What, indeed?  I enjoyed the universal questioning of the truth that you've so masterfully designed. Good writing, LJA. ~ Claire < !signature--> Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 09-12-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Flexing mental muscles, and we're all glad for it! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Questions WITH the right answers.......I love it!! Beautiful work...somehow it's very hard to believe you haven't done this before...but in any case I hope you do it again and again!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Long John--I love it when you write like this...wonderful and wise! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
LJ - I think even Billy Shakes.. - would give you a 'Here here!' for this one - great write my friend |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All righty Sir Ag... I love it all... but I like "...what they had lost was still worth the fall"... the bestest...  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LongJohn~ Oh, yeah ... now you've gone and done it ! I can see it now, a flood of lovely sonnets. Oh, puleeeeze give credit where credit is due ! This is just the lovliest piece from you. Just wonderfully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah, such wonderful poetry from you Sir Sailorman... Impressed and over-awed... regards, sudhir |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Brian - Thanks for the compliment - I have trouble reading sonnets because they don't flow the way I'm used to writing - The c-d-e c-d-e stuff at the end really throws me because I can't pick up the rhymes. Kethry - discombobulated, eh? hmmmm... I guess it's lucky for me you live so far away *veg* Claire - I was trying to capture several of the reasons we seek love, and how, in seeking it, we often leave everything else behind us. I think I may have caught five different circumstances in the first five lines. I used the next three lines to describe common thoughts that arise after love has gone awry, as in "What was I thinking?" I tried to use the last six lines to show that love drives us so hard because without it, we are lost; and, with it, we are home. Thanks for your compliment. Karilea - muscles? let's stick with reality here, girl. Muscle - lol. Thanks. Bdc - As I wrote above, sonnets and me really don't mix. I can follow the form (sort of), but I don't like the read. As I am tone deaf in singing, I am -ambic blind in writing. It is only by writing and rewriting that I can get any kind of flow at all. Iambic drives me crazy - I swear I cannot tell a real iambic from any other two-syllable combination. Martie - Thank you for the "wonderful and wise" compliment. When I think of where the little wisdom I have came from, I'm reminded of the saying, "Good judgements come from experience. Unfortunately, most experience comes from bad judgements." lol Wilfred - As for Billy Shakes saying, "Here Here," I suspect it would be while he was correcting my iambic pentameter - lol. Thanks for the compliment, and for reading the poem. I suspect many of you poets thought I wrote nothing but kitty poems, much like the painter who paints nothing but clowns. Nan - I agree with you... the three lines that flowed best for me (besides the first line) were the two lines that led up to the one you liked best. Marge - even in replys, you write beautifully - as for more sonnets - they won't be flooding the Forums from my pen - this one was hard work for me, and I'm a lazy writer. Perhaps its also because I try to avoid conflict, and the first eight lines of a sonnet should present some form of conflict. Sudhir - Thank you my friend for your compliments. I wish I could dash off sonnets, because then I would feel I live up to your gracious comments. |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
Mike...on a lgihter note, I have to write what I thought this poem was about...remember the Clarion Hotel in Va...I thought you had written something about the issue going on there...silly huh? However, in reality, its just lovely...and I'm glad it's not about the hotel ily |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
well done ... a pondering stream ... loved it. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
LJA~ This is truly a work of art, a magnificant piece and one that I envy well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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