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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2000-09-10 09:33 AM

Haiku to You

Essence of Haiku
Just seventeen syllables
Beginnings of a........

Powerful Haiku
To complete a brilliant thought
Need one more word to.....

Write short little verse
Poet of clever phrases
Cannot seem to make...........

Moon of fall cast glow
Upon her silken pale skin
Lovers about to.....

Come into the night
Watch moon on the still water
Sit with me on the.....

Water lily pad
Floating quietly on pond
With little horny.....

Poet of the web
Inspiration cannot wait
Needs more words to write....

Eloquent verses
Written from deep within heart
Just seventeen syl........

Interrupt a day
Interrupt the earth spinning
Not a poet’s last w....


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2000-09-10 09:39 AM clever, clever, beautiful thing you!  I do love this twisty, lovely, spin...
Haiku You?  Oh God Bless You!!!  Will be coming back to read with my coffee please....

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2 posted 2000-09-10 09:58 AM

Liz - This is delightful!  I'm still laughing.  What a terrific poem!  You are so darn creative.  I love this.
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3 posted 2000-09-10 04:52 PM


This is soooooo cute !
You absolutely clever poet you !
I can tell by the grin that you had
monumental folly creating it !
What fun !
Love you -

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

Wilfred Yeats
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4 posted 2000-09-10 05:35 PM

so very clever -   the unspoken - like the unnecessarily covered - is so pregnant with meaning ... (I love ellipses too)
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5 posted 2000-09-10 06:43 PM

ROFL   I wish I were even half as clever as you, Elizabeth! Delightful!


Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2000-09-10 09:22 PM

serenity, I'm so glad you enjoyed this with your morning coffee. Have another cup and write a Haiku. Everyone's doing it!

Long John, I think I need a little more practice in this Haiku thing. I am just too wordy

Marge, I'm grinning from your grin, you little quipper

Wilfred, The unspoken is the most powerful word. Sometimes it can't be spoken, just a veil sometimes cannot be removed. In the case of the Haiku, words are unspoken for a
reason - it's against the rules!

Denise, It's great that you are laughing. Glad you liked the little poem. Hope to see you soon


Lone Wolf
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7 posted 2000-09-10 09:46 PM


Love your haiku!!  You have done a wonderful job and told a neat little story here.  

Lone Wolf

Poetry should surprise by fine should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Kit McCallum
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8 posted 2000-09-11 06:30 AM

LOL Liz! Lovely compilation here ... brilliant actually! Mark challenged me not long ago to write a haiku, and I ended up with limericks, senyrus and a tanka thrown in for good measure! So I guess I finally made my attempt, and can relax now. I had great fun with it. They're kind of addicting these little guys. Wonderful writing here ... I loved this!  

Best wishes,

Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2000-09-11 06:38 AM

regards O Liz,

Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 2000-09-11 06:40 AM

Lone wolf, Thanks for your comments

Kit, I'd love to read the poem of which you speak. I'll have to look for it. In the meantime, Happy Haikuing!
Thanks so much for your comments


Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 2000-09-11 06:42 AM

Thank you, Sudhir, you always make me smile.
And thank you for completing the thought

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