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Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-09-08 12:59 PM

I think I'm too far gone.

Reality fades away,
I feel as if I'm all alone.

The sun melts away the night,
gives birth to one more day.

I don't mean to sound morbid,
but I wish it would all end,
'cause to be honest I want
to go back to where it all began.

Take me home now.
I can't stay to see tommorrow.
I've got to get home some how.
Won't you take me, please?

The walls are closing in.
My anxiety is getting braver.

I can't seem to remember where I am,
I'm not completely sure where I've been.

I've got no clue where I am going.
I guess I have no way of knowing,
'cause yet again my empathy is growing.

I've got to get home.

[This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 09-08-2000).]

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

1 posted 2000-09-08 02:13 PM

Effigy*
I think we have all been in this place of
alone and desperation...I know it doesn't
always help to know that...your poem touched
the cords of my heart today...the pain was
felt deeply, one hope is that in writing you
find the healing touch within the opening of
your heart. *Hugs* to you~

ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

2 posted 2000-09-08 08:27 PM

Effigy ... morbidity aside, this a wonderously structured piece ... the rhythm of:

I've got no clue where I am going.
I guess I have no way of knowing,
'cause yet again my empathy is growing.

I've got to get home.

is excellent ... keep writing ... your journey (and mine), have just begun ...
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My calling before me, let quill be my offering;
For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive.

M.A.

[This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 09-08-2000).]

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

3 posted 2000-09-08 10:50 PM

"The sun melts away the night,
gives birth to one more day."

Melts away the night...I really like that.

I enjoyed reading this, and I must concur with M.A. in that this is a wonderously structured piece!

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

X Angel
Senior Member

since 1999-11-07

Posts 1521
Oregon

4 posted 2000-09-08 11:52 PM

'tis tough to get up again when it feels like all we have to look forward to is a downward spiral...
*sigh*
but just do it!
It gets easier after that..

~H
nice nice writing here too I might add

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

5 posted 2000-09-09 10:33 AM

Thanks I'm glad that you all enjoyed this. Don't worry too much I'm not depressed or anything now, this is a bit of an older poem. I just reworked it.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

6 posted 2000-09-09 05:06 PM

Effigy
This is a strong poem. I particularly liked my anxiety is getting bolder.
Glad to hear you are okay though.

Be well
Kethry.

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2000-09-09 05:19 PM

I share a burning desire to find the place where I belong...to find the woman that needs me...James

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2000-09-09 07:32 PM

Effigy~
Muchly enjoyed this writing.

'The sun melts away the night,
gives birth to one more day.'

What a lovely thought.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

9 posted 2000-09-09 08:13 PM

Kethry - thanks I'm glad that you enjoyed.

James - Don't we all want to find that majical place where woman need us.

Marge- Thanks, that also is one of my favorite lines.

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

10 posted 2000-09-21 04:26 PM

Well done again Eff...

Glad I added you to my library, I would hate to miss whatever comes next.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

11 posted 2000-09-21 05:34 PM

Effigy,
My colleagues and I concur , a very thought provoking piece ( of course I'm really not a Doctor and I don't have any colleagues ) but when it comes to personalities , I have quite a few of them and we are all in agreement...Well done
Doc

forne_marin
Member

since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

12 posted 2004-04-16 12:49 PM

You know, the more of yours I read, the madder I get. How did we lose touch? There is so much amazing work on here that I've never seen. This one was beautiful, Wes. I applaud you.

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