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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Pushed by a body cold I watch you, pitter-patter eagerly over the shore against beaten rocks stretching, you kiss the surface, marking your area of play, a wavy contoured line and I witness the step of gulls, oh how this very scene takes me back to a time, a time? oh look at the time! 'til tomorrow my friend again, I will listen to your whispers and watch you no, feel you pit-a-pat a greeting a kiss a touch a tingle over my skin Angel of Darkness 8/9/2000 [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah, the flow, the sentiments, the words, the images... and a beautiful title... Angel of Darkness, Maree, this is great poetry... regards, sudhir |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
When I got to "Oh, how this very time..." I felt like I was flying!! I truly enjoyed this. Kathleen |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
You've done a beutiful job here, what you describe so sweet and you do it so well, I loved reading it . Ah how sweet it must feel ... *sigh* . Thanks for leting us all see this wounderful, sentimental, sweet poem . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Suddi my dear, thanks so much for your lovely reply and compliment, glad you enjoyed it  Irish Rose, I am glad you enjoyed it, Thank you so very much Tom, Thank you for taking the time to read it Glad you enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree--touching and tender scene you've painted....loved reading it. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
WOOHOO girl! Tingles all over......LOVE IT, LOVE IT!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ What lovely thoughts ride the very movement of time in this piece. You just keep drawing us into your world. Beautiful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I can relate... I can really feel this hon Hey - I'm there, watching out over that ocean with you... K |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I agree. The flow of your words fit perfectly with the theme of the poem. It's very beautiful, angel.... |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
wow impressed am I at this penning ~Heather |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
A pit-a-pat on the back to you miss DA have a nice trip!!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, Angel, Marge, SB, Balladeer, x angel and Walt, thanks so very much for your lovely replies and comments. |
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