Open Poetry #9 |
One Wish |
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
If I had one wish tonight I'd wish these miles away And hold you tightly in my arms Until the break of day I'd wish the world on someone else So time for us would stand still Then maybe in that length of time Of your love I'd get my fill I'd wish for wishes that I could give To you each and every day So that when we have to be apart You could wish these miles away |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Paula, Id wish those "miles" away too great poem! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
*sigh* I'm not sure how much more of this I can take. The swooning may have permanent side effects! I don't know what is causing this writing, but hold on tight to whatever it is. It's coming out beautifully. Trev. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Wishes and dreams.....sometimes it what makes the days worth getting up for isn't it....the longing and the tenderness were felt in your words Paula. Thank you so much for your kind reply and offer of a shoulder on my poem...you are a very special lady~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Paula, This is a great poem... Wonderful work... regards, sudhir |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
*sigh* i share that wish with you! oh my, i guess if we keep wishing..eventually they will come true! lovely poem. ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Dark Angel...thank you...for your words and your wishes Trev...you are just so sweet...I thank you so very much...and I'm wishing on forever so we will see. Holly...thank you sweet lady, and the shoulder is always available hon Sudhir...you are such a kind gentleman to always compliment my work...thank you poutprincess...keep wishing...its gonna happen I just know it...thank you |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written and expressed. I enjoyed. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
A very nice poem, with a killer conclusion. Great job. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I have one wish left Paula ... It's for you ... I'll make due till I get my next allowance Lovely poem |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paula~ I hope your wish comes true! This is so beautiful It makes my heart ache for you -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Such lovely wishes on display Falling so softly far away Wishes have a way about 'em when they return to the heart they were wished upon Bringing from across the miles the very heart to make yours smile. Keep on wishing, hon. Lovely thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very beautifully written and expressed and along with that My wish for you is a happiness in all you do in life. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Such a beautiful wish, Paula! This is lovely! Denise |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Mike ...thanks glad you enjoyed it LngJhnAg...thank you, kitty kicker...glad you enjoyed the ending Rex...I thank you sir for your wish...now I know mine is coming true...because how could it not when its given by such a friend as you? Oh Sea...please dont ache for me...I have never been so happy... Sigh...Lady Marge...your sweet and poetic response just made me night...beleive me he is MY wish come true Mark...I have found my happiness...when I wasnt even looking...how aboput that? Thanks Denise...thank you and I ma happy you enjoyed it. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Mike ...thanks glad you enjoyed it LngJhnAg...thank you, kitty kicker...glad you enjoyed the ending Rex...I thank you sir for your wish...now I know mine is coming true...because how could it not when its given by such a friend as you? Oh Sea...please dont ache for me...I have never been so happy... Sigh...Lady Marge...your sweet and poetic response just made me night...beleive me he is MY wish come true Mark...I have found my happiness...when I wasnt even looking...how about that? Thanks Denise...thank you and I am happy you enjoyed it. [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 09-11-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I would want three wishes... Less miles, more money, and more time...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula, did you wish upon a star cause there's something celestial about this poem. Hope your wish comes true in every possible way. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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eyesplus2 Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 163australia |
Distance makes the heart grow fonder..... I would rather have no distance at all..... I know I can be fond up close..... I miss my beloved as well.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
miles between are mountains but they can be traversed with love and time. It would be nice if we had wishes to speak out and have come true. |
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CAMERON UNDERWOOD Junior Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 26 |
If it's meant to be, fait will decide. I too wish the mile away, so I could hold my angel close. I now play a chess game with fait, and hope with the faith of my love will bring me closer to winning the game of paitence and time. You truely speek from the heart. Very warm piece of poetry. I loved it. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
James...well then my friend if it were in my power to grant them those are the wishes you would have...thank you Kethry...I wish every night on my star...and yes my fondest wish is coming true...thanks eyesplus2...I am sorry you are apart and I wish for you to have her close once again passingshadows...wishes are just dreams yet to come true...and if you want it bad enough then you make it happen Cameron...well my wish for you my friend is a game well played...thanks |
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