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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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Well, here I am Is this what you would have wanted for me? Did you work all those nights for me to get here? Or did you want something more? I always knew that you wanted more for me because I was the first one progeny of your genes. . . Then you left Is that the way that you wanted it to be? Did you fight in that war just to have it win? Or did you want something more? I never found out what you wanted for me because you left me the first one just getting started. . . Did I do it right? Is this the way that it's supposed to be? Did you make the same mistakes that I've made here? Or did you do it differently? I'll never know because you never told me when you left me the first one your first son. . . Dad ------------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven, I know that this was not an easy one for you to write or share with us. We all have those questions that just never seem to be answered. Guess you just have to do what you feel is right in your heart and go from there. It will all work out as it should. This is a wonderful look at what it feels like to lose someone you love . . . the pain and confusion that comes with it . . . and the questions. I hope you find the answers that you seek. I am sure that he would be very proud of you . . . you know he would. Excellent writing . . .  Lone Wolf< !signature--> Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 09-07-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sven.... I don't think you need to worry about whether you did it right, my friend. I can tell by your writing the man you are, and I can also feel that you Dad would be very proud of his first born son. Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
This style of poetry is a very different side of you, you haven't shown us before. I like it very much. It is nice to sometimes write on different subjects expecially ones that are so dear to our hearts. An excellent write my friend! I would love to see you write more like this. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sven this is so different from your usual but sharing our thoughts is a way of venting our emotions and for others to help when we are emotional at times. All I can say to you is that I think you are an amazing person and a caring gentle man. Take care sweet poet man Love always Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sven, from what is learned, so shall YOU be... and we all thank you... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
The questions you ask here are familiar to me, well written, as always! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
..Sven, it is better to have loved and lost, than not have loved at all.. very heartfelt and I am sure he is smiling down upon this poem of sensitivity, wishing he were granted the time to say the words you needed to hear. Just lovely. Love, Marcy |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Although I have only just become to know you I still say, how could anyone not be proud of you?? You are an amazing man with talent that shines brightly shared with us daily....Take care!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
LW, I know. . . just felt like getting them all out. . . thank you. . . Sunny1, thank you. . . I hope so. . . Marina, thanks. . . you just might see more like this in days to come. . . tracie, thank you my friend. . . Sunshine, I have learned much. . . thank you. . . Eagle One, so glad to hear that I'm not the only one. . . thank you! Marcy, thank you. . . I hope so. . .sometimes, I feel that he does. . . Beth, thank you so much. . . your words mean a lot. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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