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The Blackened Pot (for Steve's terror challenge)
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The Blackened Pot (for Steve's terror challenge) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The Blackened PotOne would admit, a sight mundane, black pot atop a burner's flame in dreaming scene of sleeping child when slumber's moment should be mild But in the dark and breadth of night when vast, the shadows passed from light, enfold the mind and haunt the heart and bid one's innocence depart Arises, fully, fear and dread from dreams within that little head where voices stir and faces blend with deeds not meant to comprehend So after daylight's demons toil the blackened pot will steam and boil Alone, a fan of flames below Inside, a child should never know |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Challenge well met, Claire! Nightmarish! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ 'So after daylight's demons toil the blackened pot will steam and boil' And bless their little hearts ... mommy kisses 'em and makes it all better. Neat rise to the challenge, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Loved it meadowmuse  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise, thank you. Yes, the nightmares are still vivid. Marge, thanks. If only she had. Victoria, thank you very much for reading, and welcome to Passions. Not everything I write is this dark, I promise. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Goodness Claire ... I had chills in thought of what demons tore the innocence from this young child. Beautiful flow to this ... a challenge well met! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Claire, this is eerie and terrifying. Well done. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kit, I know just what you mean. Thanks for reading, and thanks for letting me know. Kethry, thank you very much...I just thought of my most frightening memory and wrote it out. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, Perhaps a little dark, but very interesting...I loved the wood stove. Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Claire, WOW, what poetry... So after daylight's demons toil the blackened pot will steam and boil Alone, a fan of flames below Inside, a child should never know ... incredible writing, my friend regards, sudhir |
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