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Troubled Waters |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! 
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it wasn't such a crime i was blocking the fire dead as my desire and i will live through....tomorrow i will get through all this sorrow I would not return there.. to that place 'cause my face isn't as pretty as it was then left now just the look of disgrace i live on today tomorrow left behind a sea of sorrow but i left my mark and you knew all along there were sharks in the water unfair twisted lies between us were we afraid to fly? they all had the same cross to bear some better at IT than others wish somebody would get out of line make a scene blow it right out of the water the sharks don't bite THAT...hard.... just do it... make it happen.... what are....YOU... AFRAID of....? you think they all don't ALREADY..know?? what was he thinking? waiting at HOME....? can't blame it on the white ZIN... baby...a sin...is a sin... like pages from.. a story book.. it's all been told.. ...before... time now for the water...to break open the door or you'll drown in those troubled waters... Julie :) |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
oh..i liked the way this one pulled me along...there is a bit of sadness here..but i detect some sass as well! enjoyed this alot! ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Julie, This poem has much depth to it... Felt like being in the mind of the poet as the ink flowed...  Coco |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Yes I think the 'sass' gave it a bit of a slam, street feel, making it more interesting than a rant... your work has a youthful appeal Jul... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I just love a poet with attitude!!!!! Great write on this one and it captured me from the beginning and kept drawing me in. |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Thank you poutprincess.....i am glad you liked it... CoCo...thank you but..in the mind of a poet..?? Is that what i am REALLY?? i am just doing what i Love.....but thank you for the compliment...  Thank you LR....and yes I know I feel YOUNGER when I write....just saying what is on my mind but I am not sure if i am sassy in "real" life or not...i'll have to ask some people close to me.... Mark...nice to C U again.....I am gald you enjoyed it.....thank you soo much... Julie :) |
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