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Capture of happening - inspired by Martie's magical writing...
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Capture of happening - inspired by Martie's magical writing... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Capture of happening -- From the eyes of a greying actor from the silver-screen -- Glancing sideways into the reflectors placed in the womb of the mirrored walls, I find myself peeking at the me -- for a moment lost in self adulation, glowing in late Summer twilight of interspersed pieces of attitude. Forgiving that moment, I turned my egoistic self toward the outside-faced window -- dismissing the oomph of vanity as I saw the evening birds come flying back to their nests after their forays into space. I felt myself slipping in time greying at millennium speed as darkness of the evening sets into the light of the day, marking the unwritten words -- each bright spot has to end. An actor on yesterday's stage has to rid himself of his make-up and popular skin to reveal what lay underneath the mask of day's glamour -- the true colours from a fading skyline when neon lamps pretend to be suns. I slipped myself into my shell, the pomp of few minutes ago left as quickly as the light -- now shrouded in quietude and aloof - with self-owned moralistic views I stayed within myself glued, yet unstuck, true. ~ [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 09-06-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir, Your imagination is endless and colorful. You pull the reader right into your poems and into your characters. I wonder if you have ever attemted a novel. I'm sure you would be as successful at that as you are at poetry This is superb Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ You are gifted with the ink of inspiration. And I think Elizabeth had a novel idea !  Love you, poet. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Liz, Thank you so much... so kind you are... about a novel, I am gathering that pot full of patience... I write short stories though... presently working on one rather longish short story (Parts 1 and 2(revised) are posted in prose section) Thanks once again  Marge, you have the kindest words for me... Thank you... regards, sudhir |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This is definitely one of you better works but there are so many of them that it is hard to say which is best. Martie is a great one to be inspired by and you have honored her with this piece quite well my friend. (now about that novel) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--I am truely honored that my poetry would inspire such a wonderful work...your talent is boundless and your heart also! I admire you...must slip down to prose and check out your fiction. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Mark, Thank you so very much... Martie, your writing is inspirational... what follows are my mere words... Thanks so much... regards, sudhir |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
An actor on yesterday's stage has to rid himself of his make-up and popular skin to reveal what lay underneath the mask of day's glamour -- the true colours from a fading skyline when neon lamps pretend to be suns. I slipped myself into my shell, the pomp of few minutes ago left as quickly as the light -- now shrouded in quietude and aloof - with self-owned moralistic views I stayed within myself glued, yet unstuck, true. Sudhir, please insert the stunned silence here, A standing ovation for sure. again excellent work my friend. "Think I'm - I'm lost among the undergrowth So much so I woke up I love you all the same" Manic street preachers You stole the sun from my heart. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
This is a very good write....enjoyed the read. Marcy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
if this is what inspiration does for you - I hope you're inspired more often - this is excellent |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Elegant comes first to mind after reading these words of yours Sudhir ... wonderfully crafted and flows so beautifully, really well done. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brian, I am searching for words here... groping for words to thank you... adn end up with just four words Thank You Very Much... Marcy, Thank you for coming by and for your kind words... Wilfred, that excellent really makes me feel flattered... Thanks Kit, you always seem to reserve the best words of praise for me... Thanks for being you, my friend.... regards to all, sudhir |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sudhir lyer~ this is my favorite from you so far, this is fantastic! Loved it -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
BRAVO WELL DONE!Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
SEA, Thank you so much.... Kethry, you leave me in HUGE smiles Thanksregards, sudhir |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
'dismissing the oomph of vanity' one of the most interesting lines I have seen from you yet Suddy... It works, it works...  Good poem my friend K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kamla, so glad to have met your approval does it? does it really work... Thanks, my friend...regards, sudhir |
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