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What Lies Within [a very special piece]
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What Lies Within [a very special piece] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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What Lies Within Hidden amongst the slender ink pen's well are dreams and poems, stories to tell in the grace of this, the written hand my fears and insecurities lose command there is no more a fervent desire than to cause a fiery, tempestuous fire O do I so want the passion to feel that for you, every written word is real to place my hand atop your chest and let your heart feel my caress to touch, to move, your soul, your mind to share this pathos with all mankind this fervent desire, this growing glow is the impetus that drives me so, O I could write of other things, but nothing more stirring will then bring a shy smile to these, my lips, then my face, that to think these, my words, you embrace, and if your heart I could ever touch that's all I would ask, it means so much. ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 5 September, 2000 [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-05-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is lovely, Sunshine... particularly the last 2 lines. *S* Well done! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, you've touched MY heart on more than one occasion. Does that count?? It's beautiful, sunshine.... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, Wonderful writing. Straight from the heart . . . love that.  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, Karilea! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Easy to see why you feel it's special ... because it is. There is a slice of a poet's soul here amidst these phrases ... your soul, dear poet. Special indeed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Very moving words, Karilea. You have touched another heart with them. Dee |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
It is INDEED VERY SPECIAL O Karilea, My regards, my friend, Sudhir |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
great post...i love it and i too can see why it is so special.....great work! < !signature-->Julie [This message has been edited by JulieAnn (edited 09-06-2000).] |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This is very beautiful writting...Obviously right from the heart...I liked this alot!!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
It is special Sunshine. . . it is. . . Beautiful work my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Sunshine-I felt these words, very beautifully done. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
To all of you, thank you, for making so many dreams possible... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
OH my Sunshine, this one is spectacular... I'm gonna keep this treasure for many a day... Coco |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sunshine,...the title drew me in and am I ever glad it did. What wonderful words,...so well put together to form this masterpiece. You reach me everytime. Take care now. *Peace. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"a shy smile to these, my lips, then my face, that to think these, my words, you embrace, and if your heart I could ever touch that's all I would ask, it means so much." You pen words that touch many hearts, Sunshine...this poem speaks from a lovely heart. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea - It's easy to see that you spent a great deal of timeon this poem. It resounds with your spirit. Very nicely done. |
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CAMERON UNDERWOOD Junior Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 26 |
Truely magical piece of work. I loved it. Look forward to other poems of great passioniate expression. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
...it, you..very special. Love, marcy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This cowboy likes riding on the words of your heart. Lovely words from a lovely lady. Your words reach many of us in all you write but this one caresses the soul. Well done my friend. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Just decided to give this yet another visit... such wonderful writing... great feeling to be reading this again and again.... regards O Karilea, Sudhir. |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Hey Sunshine It is very special I just loved it!Especially the last lines Take Care! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
You obviously gave this one a loving touch. It radiates emotion! Beautiful. Trev. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful Karilea! Your gentle and loving words compliment the wonderful flow and rhythm of this verse. Special indeed, for you have clearly penned this with such genuine sentiments! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Karilea, Very heartfelt and tender words Beautifully written by a loving poet Liz |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am having a difficult time comprehending the reach this piece has encompassed...I would thank you all individually, but words are now failing me...perhaps that's a good thing! Thank you, every one! |
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