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I won't cry
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I won't cry |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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lips pinched to tighten the anger to close the dam to feed the fire because I won’t let you make me cry shifting gears gas pedal pressed flashing lights a ticket? who cares at least I won’t cry the stereo roars “I used to care but times have changed” I press repeat somehow something has got to work... I won’t cry the car ahead of me is from Louisiana AJH579 AJH579 I swear I won’t cry pink shorts, jump ropes and exhausted smiles take my eyes and for a moment shoulders back chin held strong I think its not so hard I can do it satisfaction slowly spreads because you didn't win I won’t cry [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 08-02-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corazon... I could see the grit and determination very clearly in this well written piece... and angst and tearing of the insides of the heart too... regards, sudhir |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i do relate to this, trying to focus on something else..trying not to let the tears flow! you put it all to words beautifully! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Corazon ... you can feel the determination, yet almost see the trembling lip and tear-filled eyes trying not to let go ... incredibly expressed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, well its after lunch here, and so far so good thank you so much for your kind replies, you guys mean much to me |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Strong emotions and feelings just jump off the page...but please go ahead and cry...I remember crying in hard times and I felt so much better for it...James |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How many times have I stared at something and kept repeating something trivial to keep my mind away from an emotion I didn't want to express!!!! You've got all the words, dear corazon, and you use them like a velvet hammer. My awe continues..... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
well this morning is much better than yesterdays, I had a very enjoyable commute  and then to come to such nice compliments makes me smile even more....thanks jmlee and balladeer wow....a velvet hammer...what a way to put it....thank you my friend |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is awesome! where are you? |
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