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Louise (Nan's challenge)
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Louise (Nan's challenge) |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I pined from afar, across home room class, Gazing upon, her beautiful ash- Blonde hair, atop goddess head, I'm sorry Ms. Ness, I missed what you said. Saturday morning, detention again, I stared at the clock, a quarter to ten, But I was dreaming, of dear sweet Louise, Of my desire, to make her my squeeze. Detention was over, at sound of the bell, Freedom was mine, was loosed from school's hell- O, Louise, what a pleasant surprise, There stood my goddess, as stared in her eyes. The green of an olive, the blue of the sea, Each one a vision, directed at me, I stood there in rapture, I heard her sweet voice, Tonight is school's dance, I don't have a choice. I've been stood up, I don't have a date, There's no boy to take me, because it's so late, So Chuck, you can take me, that is if you like, I only could stutter, my name is Mike. I'll be by at seven, is all I could say, She said that's just fine Chuck, and then walked away, A splash of Old Spice, a comb through the hair, Advice from kid sister, don't be a square. The girl of my dreams, my father's sedan, Saturday night, seduction my plan, We got to the gym, and started to dance, I felt the twinge, of budding romance. I could die dancing, she squealed with delight, As she stepped on my corn, I thought I just might, Her face turned to mine, her lips close did press, At that very instant, I heard ole Ms. Ness. You can wake up Mike, detention is done, Gather your things, 'cause I have to run, And wipe that weird smile, off of your face, I'll see you next week, same time and same place. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Still grinning after the second time through...  Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sounds like the dreams in detention might just be worth serving the time.LOL....good one. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
ROFL  Great one, Mike! Yeah, school was a great place to daydream, especially math and history class (for me anyway...hehe)Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ Laughing out loud for sure ! Ms. Ness will LOVE it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey - I'll have you know I have two more whole days before school starts!!!!..  |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Chuck, well, er...I mean Mike, this is so clever and cute! LOL Take care, Melissa Honeybee< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 09-03-2000).] |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
So - Who does this kid think he is... posing as Mike.. um Chuck...??.. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
LOL I enjoyed this one! What a dream! Hey Nan, ya should let him be a while ya think?  |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
glad you enjoyed my little ode of reminisce... btw... anyone know where Louise is living now? |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hey Mikey, I think I likes it. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Dunno where Louise is - but you did get the ash blonde part right.. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--Thanks for the smile this morning...and by the way, Louise lives next door to me, come one over and I'll take you fishing. |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Haha!!! LoL! Loved the ash-blonde! Great job! |
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