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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle 
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Trivial French speaks cool waters while pebbles tan to the reality burn. Her fantasies are frivolous, composing done-before songs that reek of fanciful sighs. The canopied glow of candles creeps over his charm and canticles hail their free reign. Suffer consequences with no boundaries? Hear the cadence of gentle beats in lazy waving-- Easy comes the crest. Her fingers splay their confession while winds compose ripples with cheek-warmed highs. "Mon Cheri…..", she closes her eyes to the conjuring, to the compelling Live! Live! The futility in his voice is unmistaken; the all-encompassing illconformity. Trivial, he sings-- Trivial. < !signature--> --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley [This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 09-02-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I really like this one Chanson. . . it's different for you. . . speaks of the music of the heart. . . Excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this flowed and sang to me. That's what poetry should do. and it did! Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Chanson~ I enjoyed this ... and I'm not sure why ... and that's the beauty of some poetry. 'The canopied glow of candles creeps over his charm and canticles hail their free reign.' I could hear the canticles resounding. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Chanson, This is not trivial at all it is wondrous. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Sven - Irish Rose - Marge - Kethry......Thanks one and all for enjoying my words  --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning chansondegeste, I'm glad that I stopped by, as I read your poem and was impressed. I did like it, but like Marge, I wasn't sure why. Perhaps the meaning of your words. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Good morning, Mr. Charles. If my words can sometimes take a reader beyond the how or why and no rhyme or reason can be pinpointed then I am pleased. Like a mystery, you know? Thank you kindly for the visit and your comments. They are appreciated very much --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very lovely and not trivial at all. You have grown some. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
very creative! i'll look forward to reading more of you... this one sings just like your pen name... i enjoyed the style in this... much alliteration, lots of imagery in well chosen phrasing... |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Thank you Mark. I try my pen at different styles/formal rhyme/Non rhyme. I think versatility is what I attempt to achieve.... I appreciate your reading and commenting --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
never mind... sorry... great poem [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 09-03-2000).] |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Thank you doreen, pleased you enjoyed! (My name is Dorene...different spelling )--...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
DORENE!!! so glad to meetcha! hehe... GREAT name... has a certain ring to it...  will look for more of your work... i like your writing |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Very nice to meet you too!  --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Had to read this 3 times - it made more and more sense with each reading (scary isn't it )but I heard the cry of a poet with ennui and enjoyed the feel of the shore - A very interesting write I enjoyed much. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Scary indeed! *chuckle* As far as boredom goes, I shouldn't have any time for it Thanks, Wilfred --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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