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Chanson
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0 posted 2000-09-02 11:39 PM


Trivial

French speaks cool waters while
   pebbles tan to the reality burn.
   Her fantasies are frivolous,
   composing done-before songs
   that reek of fanciful sighs.

The canopied glow of candles
   creeps over his charm and
   canticles hail their free reign.
   Suffer consequences with no boundaries?
   Hear the cadence of gentle beats in
   lazy waving--
   Easy comes the crest.

Her fingers splay their confession
   while winds compose ripples with cheek-warmed highs.
   "Mon Cheriā€¦..", she closes her eyes to the conjuring,
   to the compelling Live! Live!
   The futility in his voice is unmistaken;
   the all-encompassing illconformity.

Trivial, he sings--
Trivial.


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--...chanson~

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley




[This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 09-02-2000).]

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Sven
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1 posted 2000-09-03 12:16 PM


I really like this one Chanson. . . it's different for you. . . speaks of the music of the heart. . .

Excellent. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Irish Rose
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2 posted 2000-09-03 12:31 PM


this flowed and sang to me. That's what poetry should do. and it did!


Kathleen


Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-09-03 03:03 AM


Chanson~
I enjoyed this ...
and I'm not sure why ...
and that's the beauty of some poetry.

'The canopied glow of candles
   creeps over his charm and
   canticles hail their free reign.'


I could hear the canticles resounding.
~*Marge*~



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Kethry
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4 posted 2000-09-03 03:16 AM


Chanson,
This is not trivial at all it is wondrous.

Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Chanson
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5 posted 2000-09-03 09:09 AM


Sven - Irish Rose - Marge - Kethry......Thanks one and all for enjoying my words  

--...chanson~

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley



Bill Charles
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6 posted 2000-09-03 10:48 AM


Good morning chansondegeste,
I'm glad that I stopped by, as I read your poem and was impressed. I did like it, but like Marge, I wasn't sure why. Perhaps the meaning of your words.


Chanson
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7 posted 2000-09-03 11:03 AM


Good morning, Mr. Charles.

If my words can sometimes take a reader beyond the how or why and no rhyme or reason can be pinpointed then I am pleased. Like a mystery, you know?  

Thank you kindly for the visit and your comments. They are appreciated very much  

--...chanson~

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley



Mark Bohannan
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8 posted 2000-09-03 11:20 AM


Very lovely and not trivial at all.  You have grown some.
doreen peri
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9 posted 2000-09-03 11:30 AM


very creative! i'll look forward to reading more of you... this one sings just like your pen name...

i enjoyed the style in this... much alliteration, lots of imagery in well chosen phrasing...  

Chanson
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10 posted 2000-09-03 12:00 PM


Thank you Mark.

I try my pen at different styles/formal rhyme/Non rhyme. I think versatility is what I attempt to achieve....

I appreciate your reading and commenting  

--...chanson~

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley



doreen peri
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11 posted 2000-09-03 12:05 PM


never mind... sorry... great poem

[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 09-03-2000).]

Chanson
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12 posted 2000-09-03 04:55 PM


Thank you doreen, pleased you enjoyed!

(My name is Dorene...different spelling  )

--...chanson~

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley



doreen peri
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13 posted 2000-09-03 05:01 PM


DORENE!!!

so glad to meetcha! hehe... GREAT name... has a certain ring to it...   will look for more of your work... i like your writing  

Chanson
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14 posted 2000-09-03 05:08 PM


Very nice to meet you too!  

--...chanson~

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley



Wilfred Yeats
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15 posted 2000-09-04 09:16 AM


Had to read this 3 times - it made more and more sense with each reading
(scary isn't it   )
but I heard the cry of a poet with ennui and enjoyed the feel of the shore -
A very interesting write I enjoyed much.

Chanson
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16 posted 2000-09-04 10:15 AM


Scary indeed! *chuckle*

As far as boredom goes, I shouldn't have any time for it  

Thanks, Wilfred  


--...chanson~

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley



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