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His Elusive Muse ... Co-written with Michael Auguste
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His Elusive Muse ... Co-written with Michael Auguste |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
His Elusive MuseThe poet struggled, pen in hand with night's elusive verse Through tumbling hours upon the clock What words! What words! he'd curse And as his wearied mind grew dull the dawn invited rest He fell into exhausted dream 'til daylight's closing crest Before his eyes could drink of dusk upon awaking there he felt the tracing tendrils' touch of heather scented hair He woke to moistened lips and felt their warmth upon his cheek Her words were more like a whisper so softly did she speak He gazed into enticing eyes as last sun rays were spent Her carmine hair in lamp light glow The room was now her scent She led him to his writing desk as shadows filled the room Another lamp she set in place to help dispel the gloom Before he could begin protest the pen was in his hand Her nearness drove his heart to depths his mind could not command With pen in ink and then to page he set about to write Her velvet fingers 'pon his neck, this creature of the night So near, each breath was one of her Her fragrance was his air And on he wrote into the night his hand guided with care Upon the wall the clock chimed two and still his hand did write This muse in dress of sea-green silk must leave with coming light His words, intoxication's own dripped fertile endless ink So close, his lady's fragrant form He wrote, but could not think The pages filled with brilliant rhyme, an epic verse composed She turned to him and with a kiss his book, she gently closed The stars were dipped in lace that night but soon they were no more as darkness swallowed by dawn's light cast day upon the floor With aching eyes, for her he searched This muse, his lady fair but all remained, a written book ... and scent of heathered hair [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
All I can say is WOW!! You've got some amazing lines in here... such as "the dawn invited rest He fell into exhausted dream 'til daylight's closing crest" and "His words, intoxication's own dripped fertile endless ink". Wonderful!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully co-mingled imagery!! I can't tell who is where...your vision is so true. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I have not nearly the time I need to reply to this, Claire (and Michael Auguste) -- but I had to let you know that I read it and I was swept. Beautifully written. --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
 I must agree with Marite - I searched for clues who wrote which lines and failed utterly. - this is a wonderful creation take a bow you two  |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Claire & Michael, What wonderful images you have created. I really enjoyed your joint effort. Dee |
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American Princess Junior Member
since 2000-08-21
Posts 49USA |
Claire and Michael, What breathtaking writing! You make a wonderful team. Very nice imagery. American Princess |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
ladysixstring, thank you for your "WOW" and nice comment. We had such fun writing this. Martie, what a wonderful compliment.. thank you so much. We, too, were very please with how well we wrote together. Of course, we rather suspected, but this confirmed it. Thanks again Kess, that you were swept is reply enough, my friend. Our thanks go out to you! Wilfred, thanks so much for reading and for such kind words. And to even do a dance for us...wow!! Thanks a bunch! Dee, thank you, sincerely. We really enjoyed writing together. American Princess, your words are very much appreciated, and we're awfully glad you enjoyed our collaboration. Thank you! [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done you two! Lovely! Denise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire and Michael, this is a superb poem written by two excellent poets. . . your visions fit perfectly. . . Excellent!! ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Wow! If I repeated all my favorite lines I'd have to retype the entire poem. This is a wonderful piece obviously written by two very talented poets. Great Job! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
When I saw the two names together, I knew this would be a great one , and it is. Your poet pens compliment each other. It is a wonderful and beautiful poem. Next book, maybe? Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise, thank you very much, my friend. Sven, thank you for reading, and for the "excellent." Tennessee Angel, your words are so generous and sweet...thank you! Liz, your gracious response is very much appreciated. Next book? Who knows! < !signature-->Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire and Michael~ What exquisite beauty is found in the combining of your talents. Michael, you've beckoned a gentle muse and touched her as she's touched you. Claire, what a gifting awareness. I would hope that this summoning will come again. Two gentle spirits ... inspired and sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Marge, we thank you with humbled hearts for such kind words, my friend. Michael and I were certainly inspired in our writing of this piece, and it was indeed a pleasure for me to work with him, as his gift is grand. Thanks again for your lovely thoughts. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
This is a brilliant joint effort! Breathtaking..... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
English Rose, we thank you for the "breathtaking" and for your enthusiastic response, and are glad to know that you enjoyed reading this. It is a bit lengthy, but once we began, the story simply took off on its own, I believe. I think we were a little out of breath, too, by the time we finished! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Thank you everyone for all your wonderful and kind comments. Fortunately I had a gifted writer and and extremely patient friend to co-write this with. Michael by Michael Auguste "But I am so like everyone. And everyone is so like me We cork our contents, lest they flee Until our lives are spent and d |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Claire and Michael, I adore the work of you both and the combination of the two of you together is amazing...this is a stunning duet!! Bravo!! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Applauding loudly here...what a great poetic duo you two make |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Hi Butterflies, "stunning"...I do so like that word... Both Claire and I do thank you so much for your wonderful comments. We really enjoyed writing this together and I'm sure it will be just the first of several we'll one day work so closely on. She's a remarkable talent.Michael by Michael Auguste "But I am so like everyone. And everyone is so like me We cork our contents, lest they flee Until our lives are spent and d |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
hoot_owl_rn, Claire and I both appreciate your very kind words. Thank you, my friend. Michael by Michael Auguste "But I am so like everyone. And everyone is so like me We cork our contents, lest they flee Until our lives are spent and d |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
See what happens when you give a working gal a Monday off !  BUMP ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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