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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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0 posted 2000-09-02 10:00 PM


Mysteries

A spider’s web in dewdrop’s quiver
Draws my eye to watch the sight
As sunlight hits the prism mesh
Intriguing pupils to delight

A maze of wonder, gift of beauty
A sparkling canopy of lace
A silken web spun to perfection
Of spider’s own inherent grace

Who has taught her how to weave
A  veil to catch the morning dew?
I would write poetic verses
Of this mystery, if I knew

Warblings of a creature stirs me
Days of stifling scorch and haze
From out the earthly crypt he crawls
And climbs a tree in August days

Donning light and fragile shell  
Camouflaged against the bark
It knows the hour of its rebirth
Appearing from its place of dark

How does locust know his moment
To emerge through morning dew?
I would write poetic verses
Of this mystery, if I knew

You and I in love’s dimension
Discovering our time and space
There is a true exquisite moment
When two souls are in embrace

How do lovers know when love
Has reaped the scent of morning mist?
If I knew that splendid moment
I would write a poem like this

Elizabeth Santos


[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 09-03-2000).]

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2000-09-02 10:08 PM


Elizabeth,
Wonderful rewrite, I'll be leaving tomorrow and wont be back till the 11th. Love Sy

Wilfred Yeats
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2 posted 2000-09-02 10:16 PM


you could - you did -and it is beautiful~S~
Sunshine
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3 posted 2000-09-02 10:22 PM


Elizabeth, as well done as ever...and Sy...you'll have a lot of catching up to do.  God speed you home soon...
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-09-02 10:31 PM


Oh Liz ... just lovely, and write it you did indeed.  You've described this splendid, mystical moment beautifully my friend.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2000-09-02 11:40 PM


Beautifully written, Liz...just lovely.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
6 posted 2000-09-03 04:49 AM


Thank you Sy,Wilfred, Sunshine , Kit, and Claire. This poem has been in my rewrite file for along time, finally got it out.
Thank you for your comments. Sy, we will miss you and  your wonderful poetry. Hope you write lots while you're away
Liz

Denise
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7 posted 2000-09-03 09:38 PM


I love it too, Elizabeth! One of my favorites of yours!  

Denise

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8 posted 2000-09-03 09:50 PM


Lizzie~
Great enjoyment, my friend.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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