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On the Phone
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On the Phone |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I sit here in my big old chair the phone pressed to my ear and listen to all the things you dont say Minutes slip into hours hours spent learning our hearts working past the doubts and fears Planning a lovers rendevous teasing and tormenting each other with promises of lovers games Hearing your life through this phone listening to you sing to me listening to you love me Your voice, your laugh, your tears we have shared them all over this phone and now, yes now, the time has come To hang up this phone and see in each others eyes what our voices know is true I love you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes Paula some feelings only enjoyed while looking into each others eyes...James |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A big but neccessary step when two hearts are bonded. Really nice read and the tenderness only got better as it went along.  |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Paula, this is a very interesting piece of writing.....if it is from personal experience I'm sure a lot of us here know how you feel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Paula, You have a touch phone? Enjoyed the read. |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
familar story...hope it goes sweet for you |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Paula, Lovely work here... regards, sudhir |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Hi Paula ... a nice simple style (like a conversation) ... refreshing read ... thanks. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Paula, you always amaze me with the poems of reality. Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Paula... When I read this, it was like reading my own thoughts!!!! Are you playing around inside my head again, twin? This is what I needed to read right now, and I thank you! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh..scary isn't it? To finally meet someone face to face that you've only 'seen' with your heart. Good luck! BTW I love the poem!  |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow, it's exactly my story, only most of it was over the net... ICQ... Whhhoooohaaaa!!!! Great poem! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
James...yes I knew you would understand Mark...one step at a time...you just have to make it a forward step...not backwards Jeff...you know it Seymour...LOL a touch phone...wouldnt that be great...thanks Lorelei...so do I Sudhir...thank you my friend Mark...so nice having you back and reading my things...thank you Xeonox...well reality...whats that? LOL I write what I live thats all I know...thank you friend Sunny girl...I think if I'm not in your head you are in mine LOL...I'm glad I can touch you TWIN Ms. deVine...scary...thrilling...panic stricken...exciting...all of the above...but worth it I know...thank you LM...I think its lots of peoples stories in this day and age...but worth it if you are honest |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
paula you have always shown the true beauty of free verse in your poetry, once again thank you "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
JnR4eva...thank you free verse just comes more easily to me than rhyme [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 09-03-2000).] |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Paula, this is lovely. You ae in my thoughts. I think we have something in common. I too talk on the phone and have meet my other. *sighs* Good Luck my friend |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Oooooh! It's time to step beyond the intellectual and emotional attraction, see if the circuit closes and the spark jumps. Will the pheremones do the happy dance? Woo-hoo! I'm excited just thinking about it! Excellent verse Paula! Just great! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi Paula, believe it or not I've returned three times to read this poem of your's and now I say to myself... Tell the lady she did a splendid verse! Coco |
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