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September Day |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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September Day This September day catches my surface in cool breezes and sheltered sun. Sheltered sun of sky alive with full bearded white dove’s whispering feathers blooming explosions of cotton. I have caught fall looking in my open door checking my vision with leaves that fill the air. I would dance down the street bare my melting surface reshape my need and feel the opening but fall fills me with the sigh of a mother whose child has again forgotten to sweater her silk fragile youth to protect it from approaching time so it cools the heat of my expansion now shrinks this summer shimmering drinks the froth from laughter and settles this need to fly. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-01-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ohhhhh my lil lady....you got me wanting to come to SO CAL really bad now and give you a huge hug. Got any room in that van of yours? |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie...this writing is so nice, and well done. Here comes fall! Thanks for sharing this with me. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Martie~ Well written with wise words in the last two stanzas! September is a magical month because it is the best of two worlds: experiencing both Summer and Fall. I love this piece because I love the beginning of Fall - the feeling in the air and the crisp smell to it. Being a September "baby" I love how you pay tribute to my birth month  Take care, Melissa Honeybee< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 09-01-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is some of the most beautiful poetry on the net, in my opinion. You do us proud! Kathleen |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
so many lovely lines - ... but "drinks the froth from laughter" wrapped itself around my heart and would not let go - so lovely Martie- as always |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I love September. Your poem was lovely. ~H |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Different...this has a lot of difference in it for you Martie... still left me with a sigh.. K |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is typical of the beauty and depth of your work, but also brings out the child in you and the mature and compasionate adult, and you, and as usual draws the reader's sentiments right into the poem. I do, in truth believe that your work is among the best I've read. Liz |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--lots of room in the van...a hug doesn't take up much room. Bill--thanks for such a nice comment. Melissa --it is my birth month too..I'm glad the poem pleased you. Kathleen--What a wonderful compliment, thank you so much! Bill--Thanks for the heart and the as always...you're sweet. Kamla--different maybe, but I'm glad for the sigh. Liz--You always keep me flying with warm words...thank you my dear friend. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Martie, This is excellent, great work... regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Exceptional Martie! The imagery you bring to these words is simply stunning. I always enjoy reading your poems at least twice before responding ... the flow is always so sweet! Beautiful work! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ As September sighs into my dawning I'm caught in refreshing adorn The coming of the leaves turning Pirouetting on nature's autumn morn Thanks for the inspiration in the beauty of you and your thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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