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Illusions of Immunity |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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A cloud of ivory candlelight < !signature-->paints starlets upon my wall they drift and dance...so eerily... then into shadows fall. Illusions of immunity exposed by darkling eyes, for every moment’s vulnerable to another’s gilded lies. An embrace of airy phantoms surrounds this whitewash room their howls pulse in quickened beat and within my being loom. Dreams depart in ashen haze for faith in life betrayed me How can I yearn for daybreak’s light when your hate is all I see? So here alone I pace the dark Where our residue still lingers And hope one day I’ll rinse away The crimson ‘pon your fingers. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 08-31-2000).] |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
I enjoy a poem that makes you look deeply to find the meaning in the words that are written. Wonderfully done. With perseverance even the snail reached the Ark. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
if walls could talk! very nice poem alwye |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Excellent!!! I loved the dark feel of this one just casually and perfectly dripping down the screen...great poem. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Krista, this is a terrific poem, I loved the way it flowed so nicely and I read it smoothly, the imagery of being in a dark room with candlelight and the way it danced upon the walls was wonderful. I especially loved the second and last stanza's  Excellent Krista |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
krista, this is gorgeous. it is probably my favorite of all your poems, i love it. i wish i could write poetry half as well. dark and brilliant. "so here alone i pace the dark where our residue still lingers and hope one day i'll rinse away the crimson 'pon your fingers." *shivers* i LOVE this poem. beautiful job! erin [This message has been edited by Silkdragon (edited 08-31-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow...visually very good..reminded me of the Survivors finale!  |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Ooh... I like the dark atmosphere of this one, and that first verse was great! I loved the images, another great one, my dear. Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all so very much! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
as always...very reflecting... loved it... If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Dreams depart in ashen haze for faith in life betrayed me How can I yearn for daybreak’s light when your hate is all I see? So here alone I pace the dark Where our residue still lingers And hope one day I’ll rinse away The crimson ‘pon your fingers. This is so visually haunting and yet so beautifully presented. The darkness is intense. Loved it loved it loved it. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Indeed a splendid poem with a story only your pen could have inked so well.. I thank you for writing this one as it's a reading close to my heart... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
poem beautiful poem hauntingly beautiful lovingly haunting illusionary loving immune illusions awed immune impressed awed very impressed enjoyed very much enjoyed much .. My regards, sudhir |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I thank you all very much, especially you Sudhir! What a wonderful response! Thank you again. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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