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Savannah Smiles |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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* Just a little note before you read here so to stop any wild rumors about me before they begin...sometimes a poem just comes to me, writes itself and I have no choice but to put the words on paper...sometimes when that happens, it's a poem about something I've never experienced or written from a different view than mine (in this case, a male perspective) Who knows, perhaps I'm haunted by the ghost of a poet past  *Savannah Smiles Savannah smiles and I am taken Back to summer bayou days To misty swamps and scent of jasmine To sweet magnolias by the bay Savannah smiles and I am taken To warm beaches, crystal sand Where on a blanket, I lay sleeping Entangled in her legs of tan Savannah smiles and I am taken To late nights, along the dock Where barefoot we are slowly dancing Mindless of the ticking clock Savannah smiles and I am taken To that day in Tennessee Where in a gown of pure white satin She pledged her heart and life to me Savannah smiles and I am taken By the moment captured here With eyes of blue, she holds me captive As sunlight glistens off her hair Savannah smiles and I am taken < !signature--> What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us. ~Ralph Waldo Emerson [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-30-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ruth...you're riding those "planes" again... so well done, so soft...so...Ruth! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank God for the note upfront... LOL hey Ruth, a wonderful poem this one... full of lovely imagery... regards, sudhir |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ruth, to my way of thinking, gifted is the writer who can effectively "be" withing the realm of another's world. This takes perception, imagination, and immense understanding of human nature. I loved this in every way, my friend, and applaud your superb poetic vision. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Ruth - ( may I be so familiar?) I truly loved this - and I know what it is to (at least) try - to write from the perspective of the other sex - So I know how difficult it can be - You've done extremely well - from my POV - |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
My my my...you've written this so very well! It seems as though you were in someone else's head or they were in yours. The details just bring it to life! A well written piece, that brings about quite a vision! Excellent Ruth! <*\\\>< Be an organ donor...give your heart to Jesus! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ruth - You're braver than I... I'd never be able to pull this off - not in a million years... and you breeze through it... geesh..  Nice job! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Absolutely lovely! I found this poem so softly sweet and tender...no matter what muse gave this to you.  |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Ruth, this just shows another facet of your talent, extremely well done. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey there, Hootessa - This is such a precious poem. I can feel the love throughout. You are so great at expressing yourself. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Simply beautiful!!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, this was lovely, and written from the other persepective so well, one would never know... Enjoyed this a lot. catalinamoon PS my granddaughters name is Savanna.. |
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nona Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 139Fla |
Lovely words to express a love of another I think the owl is wise and can see in the soul of another.Perhaps it was you in another life time............nona |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Truly a great imagination, a gift and written so very romantically. Loved it's warmth and love. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes Hoot Owl a womans smile can do all that and so much more...beautiful...James |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This was beautiful, and I tried real hard pretending that you were a man. It was exhausting, but I made it though this lovely poem. Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
and Maree smiles This is a beautiful poem Ruth, it took me to a different time 1950's maybe, hmm can't control what goes through this head o mine I loved it Ruth and thanks for the trip |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
This was a truly beautiful poem...I admire your talent to write in another perspective...sounds like you have a good handle on the male perspective. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I've been told I have a good imagination but imagining you as a man would really be pushing me to the extreme...but darned if you didn't do it! This is really beautiful, Ruth, with just the right touch of charm and style... |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I have read many things from you and I need to tell you that you are very gifted. This was a sweet, tender poem and I loved the perspective. Now, I am laughing at the other comments here Sudhir*lol Liz*lol Balladeer*lol This palce is great for wonderful poetry and giggles to! Jenn E |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot~ A lovely read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I think back "then" and look at "now." All I can do, is just say...WOW! C. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I just want to say thank you to everyone for your very kind comments on this piece...Christopher, what can I say but thanks for your support in my poetic growth. Claire,Gemini, LJ,Marie and Jenn...your comments and support of my work really means a great deal to me...thank you Liz, Sudhir, Balladeer...thanks for the smiles |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Ruth great poem! Glad you wrote the note first. You do have style! Deb |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Ruth, I am certainly smiling after this poem, excellent piece, beautifully written sigh..as always. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Deb and Brian |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Ruth...A lovely and remarkable look through the eyes of love...very well done! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you Martie |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Well !"I'm taken" lovely poem Ruth If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very very sweet......and from a males perspective....you have done much better than I could have with this. I applaud you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Advanti and Mark |
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