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I walked with Gods
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I walked with Gods |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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I walked with Gods A millennium of heat Befriended a tepid shore. Swirling waters gave me fleet Perceptions of the evermore. Cloaked me a lovers shroud Sponsored me a wild kismet Took me up into the clouds Bathed me in a new beget. There I walked forevers way Strolling lanes where Gods have reign. Unaware the time of day Oblivious of all explain. Raptured in a sophistry Captured by a moments flight. Swept into a pleasantry Gone the dastard ways of trite. Above the truth, against the odds. I walked a moment with the Gods. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Above the truth, against the odds. I walked a moment with the Gods." Sigh - I love your couplets...  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I agree with Nanners here I love those too!  But I love each line also <*\\\>< Be an organ donor...give your heart to Jesus! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sy, you got directions to that place where trite doesn't reign? I could use a couple of days there....good work here |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, I love your love of my couplets. *L* WhtDove, Thank you so much. *L* Balladeer, It comes in the form of a special pill, LOL. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Another Seymour Classic... My regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Seymour's bent heavensent... hugs, you! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Seymour, I admire the interesting ways in which you manipulate the parts of speech and do so with cleverness and humour. This piece is grand. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Superb verse in every way I agree with Claire Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Thank you my friend. Sunshine, Thank you and *L* Elizabeth, THank you Love Sy |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Well, I feel like Echo when I say this, but this is a beautiful piece! I also love the last two lines, a great ending to a great piece. Keep up the good work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LoveBug, You have bitten me with your lovely comment. |
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