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Poetry in the Sand
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Poetry in the Sand |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Poetry in the Sand I asked for something solid But you offered sand Drawing words in dirt With a stick and sleight of hand. Poems that faded gradually With the coming of high tide Painfully reminding me Of the love we had denied. I let the riptide carry me Swaddling like a mother Wrapping me in testimony Caressing like a new lover. Floated past the breakers Past reefs, into open sea Till I was looking back at land Somewhere outside of me. No longer requiring oxygen As though I inherently knew And there on the ocean floor Were the words written by you. © 2000 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow is everyone in sync with me today??? I have read three poems so far and I have related so well to all of them...this is very good...  Julie :) |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful, Corinne. Great thoughts beautifully expressed.... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Corinne, this is a wonderful poem. Causing a lot of us to nod our heads, I am sure. Thanks for writing it. Catalinamoon |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Corinne, sleight of hand, indeed. This piece is mysterious, elemental, beautiful...I enjoyed reading it very much, and loved your ultimate placement of the words on the ocean floor. Very creative! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
There is no place on earth I love more than the shore - and I love all its images - even the sad ones - this struck home with me too - Thank you ~*Keep love in your heart. A life without it is like a sunless garden when the flowers are [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, JulieAnn, glad we are in sync with you! Thank you, Balladeer! Catalinamoon - thanks, I wish I'd thought of that nickname, its awesome! Claire, thank you for the kind words, but you are the master of mysterious poetry! Wilfred, I'm with you! I grew up at the ocean, and all emotions flow more freely there. Corinne |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Corinne, nothing short of your usual brillance. Another excellent piece "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Superb piece of writing. You always lay one down for us that shows us the brilliance behind you. This one does the same. I love looking for your name as I KNOW that it will be a wonderful poem inside. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Corinne...just loved this writing of yours. The words just flow from your pen, and heart, I might add. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corrine--You always say it so well! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Another sea-worthy gem - Nice one, Corinne..  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Hey don't got too far out to sea, my boats in dry dock..... Interesting poem what's it all mean...  Park |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Brian, thank you very much! Kind of a dark piece, but a reflection of mood at the time. Mark - that's the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me, thank you! Thank you, Bill, Martie, Nan! Park, well, it's a poem about lost love, death and rebirth, I guess. Dry dock, eh? Hmmm. Corinne |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne, This is another of your gems written from deep within ... a brilliant piece in my view... regards, sudhir |
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