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Turning Point
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Turning Point |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
The lightning comes in a flash Followed by a thunderous crash The storm outside rages on With the ferocity of the lion Rain pours from the sky Mirroring the tears I cry It was such a long week Refuge from the storm I seek I came here to unwind Easing the burden on my mind Sometimes it just is too much Living without your touch I sit here in the dark Trying to erase the mark That is on my lonely heart Which is the most important part The past is sometimes haunting At times the future is daunting Don't know which way to turn Because the feelings still churn Letting go is very rough On my body it's been rough Dealing with how things are Is taking a toll so far ---------------------------------------------------- Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Letting go is always rough especially when we are not ready to. The pain can consume us and often does. Very beautiful write here.  |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I just want to say ditto to marks reply |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You've touched my heart in this LW...**angel wing hugs** to you my friend...the sun will shine and it will be all the brighter when you step from the darkness~ |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
I love the way you open this poem...setting the mood...makes the rest of the poem all the more touching...I think that is the word I wish to use. In short, it touched the mark on this girl's heart. (Happy belated birthday as well. )Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Lone Wolf, you've used the storm in this poem very well, resulting in quite an emotive piece of writing. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very emotional stuff... and excellently written... regards, sudhir |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
LW, enjoyed reading this poem. Pretty emotional stuff! Stay well! Danny A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Letting go is so hard and I think "HOW" to let go is so diffrent for each heart as we are all so unique. Feel what you feel, never stop sharing these feelings. LOL, Who the heck am I to give advice?! lol...... I feel this, I do and I know this for certain, :HOW" to survive anything in this life is within us and it will make an apperance someday. Take Care and write.....write... Jenn E |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~LW,...sending sunshine your way. This poem is so touching. It speaks and it's message aches my heart. I feel for you gurl. Super expression. Take care of you. *Peace. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LW~ great one here, love the way you wrote this, I hope your heart heals soon. -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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