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Silence of Duplicity
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Silence of Duplicity |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There are scars on my arms left by an itch to finish start of long ago... for even in conception a death in me grew slow... and I became what I became I tell you all just what I am... I have loved too many, luv... some not too well others, fell to shadow of regret... and even yet today I drink too deep the cup of life.... and I hold your hand and walk awhile just for price a scent of spice blessing's grace... gift of life a smile upon your face. I kiss too well and hit too hard and sharpen claws on stone of walls that I feel cornered in. And should you dare I pray you will-- tell all--I beg you-- Please begin. Drink and take you serum's pill.. until you think you've had your fill... made partner in complicity by silence of duplicity... |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well written powerful piece If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wow this is one piece that packs a punch. I see an inner strength finding light after many struggles in life and the desperate need to find that first breath of fresh air. lovely work from you on this day.  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Yikes!!!  |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow...I am not even going to try to go into the depth of this poem.....not in one reply...Loved it....Awesome (does anyone say that anymore?)oh well I really DO like it... < !signature-->Julie [This message has been edited by JulieAnn (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
sweet serenity....is that you??? I didn't mean cheap....really!! I wuz just kidding!! Forgive me...please!! sharpen claws on stones of walls I feel cornered in....AWESOME!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Had to pop in to say thanks for the kindesses--and a hug to m'Deer, ya made me smile---and a note of interest, I like to write to music, and on this occasion I will name the three songs that are the appropriate background score: "Inside Looking Out-" Grand Funk Railroad "Death On Two Legs--" Queen "The Real Me--------" The Who and serenity exits, grinning... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I kiss too well and hit too hard and sharpen claws on stone of walls that I feel cornered in. And should you dare I pray you will-- tell all--I beg you-- Please begin. Drink and take you serum's pill.. until you think you've had your fill... made partner in complicity by silence of duplicity... wow Serenity, intense is not the word, this one had me pushed hard against the wall and held there until the end. Excellent piece. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the silences speak volumes. . . of secrets left untold. . . and trusts shared. . . shared, but never broken. . . powerful piece my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
your writing gets better and better and better and better and THIS, my friend, is the power of the written word.... you are a Poet. no doubt in my mind... and i am awed by you! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity--you write from that stong muscle, the heart...and there is much power in the pulse of this poem. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This work builds in intensity - consistently to the crescendo of the final couplet - and that says it all - Nice job on this one, serenity..  |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Oh My! WOW! This was so powerful.....strength just flows out of it. WAY TO GOOD!!!! Jenn E |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
What can I say girl? This one knocked me off the chair! Great stuff, and very, very powerful! Excellent work! <*\\\>< Be an organ donor...give your heart to Jesus! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very raw and honest!! Loved it..  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
brian..........as always I thank you for your graciousness--it is much appreciated--hand-0ver-heart curtsey to you... doreen..........my girl..you've no idea how much you've inspired me with your candid and delightful whirlwind "stream of consciousness" contributions...I am equally in awe. Martie..........I am such a fan of yours. methinks your heart pumps INK...lol and hugs. Nan.............I do so appreciate your comments and your calming influence...has meant so much to me...I thank you. Jenn--thanks for the great comp, and... Dovie--always lovely to see your replies...as well as your personal inspiration to me...and... Sharon..many hugs to you, altho I fear I need lessons in how to relate honesty without all of that "raw"....grins m'friend, I hope... and last but not least, Sven... I most especially thank you for acknowleding that confidence and promises should not be betrayed...as trust is the cornerstone of love...which in turn, is the binding of romance...... I thank you all...and this time I wanted to do it individually...smiles....and love to the forum. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Serenity* In honesty I have read this several times and the feelings came crashing but no words to describe them...this was so powerfully written..honestly with out holding back the pain and the strength that you have in your soul...outstanding work~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
The powerful touch of serenity holds its grasp on mere mortals like me- stunning words jump off-- the screen I see the powerful touch of serenity _________________________________ regards O Serene One, sudhir |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Serenity, what a very powerful poem, very well done. You painted a masterpiece here. |
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