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Torture Tango
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Torture Tango |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
I do not want to dance with you! I really don't care for this tune! One must lead as one follows... I am dizzy and must leave soon! Slow down! Would you pick up the pace? I like the words but not the beat! "I think the rhythm is wrong for you," Say my soar and reluctant feet. No longer swept up by your song! I'm moving to a different drum! It's time to turn and face the music? Where are we dancing to or from? This torture tango we've become; May be just fabulous to some. I cannot feel my feet... so numb... It could be the coke and cheap rum! I think I'll just sit this one out, It could be this room or the smoke; Could be the tired choreography, Or living in this same sick joke! I need to shake you off, shake loose, Shake these blues and shake my ass! Shake, shake, shake like a good earthquake... You may NOT have this dance, I'll PASS! [This message has been edited by Toddles (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Todd! This treasure danced right into my heart it did! Loved it right from the title on down to the superb ending!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Thanks Kit: More dancing ghost from relationships passed, inspiring me, torturing me and best of all moving me forward!!! |
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N2Wishin Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 38 |
I know these feelings of needing to break away & feeling swept up and controlled by someone you are involved with romantically... Time for a solo dance routine or just a big free-style boogie fest! Nice Poem! |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Thanks for the insight and for the interpretation N2! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Toddles... Now I think this is superb!!!!!!! I'm not just saying that, I'm serious. The writing was great, but the choice of words was so perfect...I am totally impressed! I'm a musician, and I can't tell you how many times I've watched a couple dance as though they were on opposite sides of the galaxy. Next time that happens, I'll remember this poem!!!!!!!!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Sunny, thank you for your appreciative words! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
POUT...I dont want to dance with you either...this is great Todd...such a different way of looking at the ending of a relationship. UH could you get OFF my toes? |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
LOL Thanks Paula! |
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