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Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

0 posted 2000-08-27 11:11 AM

Sometimes...
....Writing Does No Justice.

The wren
slick with remnants of night's hand
weighing heavily upon her breast.
Beak closed, housing a silence,
ears joining a leaf's crackle.
The duet heartsounds
shuttering to wind's quest
reveal what the ink cannot.

The thistle
spreading its fingers greedily
among the scent of heather
will choke finer greenery
in her attempt to exist.
Her will growing stronger to express
needs as each petal appears.
The irony blooms,
revealing what the ink cannot.

The woman,
features pale, stature sedate.
Behind weakened eyelids lives
knowledge held confidently.
Pressed upon her forehead
are years of drama.
A lifeline of wisdom
paves her shaking palms;
scored footprints into
her soul.
Ponderance of each step
reveals what the ink cannot.

...chanson~

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2000-08-27 11:15 AM

And sometimes it does.....just like now. This is exquisite and it is definitely going in my library. Beautiful piece you lay before us this lovely Sunday morn.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

2 posted 2000-08-27 11:15 AM

Good morning chansondegeste,
Caught your poem just as it came up. Quite a message that is to be read from your writing.

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

3 posted 2000-08-27 11:21 AM

Mark, I feel honored to be included in your library and am pleased you enjoyed this piece.
Thank you

...chanson~

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

4 posted 2000-08-27 11:23 AM

And a good Sunday morning to you, Bill. Johnny-on-the-spot you are today *grin*

Thank you

...chanson~

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

5 posted 2000-08-27 01:23 PM

Hello chansondegeste..

         This is a great line.....
    "scored footprints into her soul"!!!!
   Oh, the images here are truly wonderful!
   I like poems that paint pictures, and
    you did a splendid job on this one!!

Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

6 posted 2000-08-27 01:27 PM

Thank you Sunny!

It's a very good thing I don't have paints
and a brush in hand when I'm writing.
What a mess that would be! (A painter I am
not. *grin*)

Very pleased you enjoyed. Thank you again

...chanson~

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2000-08-27 01:40 PM

Chanson~
I am stunningly impressed with this piece.
Such delicate imagery flung across the canvas.

You have a wonderful grasp of the craft.
I enjoyed this.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

juliet_2u
Senior Member

since 2000-07-23

Posts 1125
North Carolina

8 posted 2000-08-27 02:04 PM

Chanson this is exquisite. So soft and so very tender. Well done.
Juls

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

9 posted 2000-08-27 03:13 PM

You are very kind, Marge. I'm happy you enjoyed it. (If I had to choose, this one would be one of my favorite ones)

Again, thank you

....chanson~

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

10 posted 2000-08-27 03:16 PM

juliet, thank you kindly.

...chanson~

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