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That Word - (Paula's Challenge)
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That Word - (Paula's Challenge) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Sorry Paula the poem got to me before I got to bed, so here 'tis, of sorts.  I care for you, yes I do truly, deeply madly but if you want to hear that word I will turn away so sadly I want you and I need you it's you, I'll always trust but, I stumble with that word so could we be in lust I yearn for you, when you sleep I'll hold you tenderly with waves of affection deep, visible, enough to see I will take you for my wife and stay eternally but if want me without strife don't ask that word from me I miss your voice so true and clear when you go away and I'll give you passions cheer if you choose to stay I'll work hard to provide everything you need we can raise a family beginning with my seed but please don't ask that word of me my lips will never say those little words you long to hear though my heart is old and gray Accept what I can offer my soul I give to you although I cannot tell you its promises are true |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Kethry - Man - you are prolific! This is a terrific response to the challenge. Spoken with real insight. And written really well. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Kethry although I (love) your poem...I (love) the L word and need to hear it....I think everyone wants to along with the actions ~~softly (loving) this challenge Maureen |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ I think you 'side-stepped' the issue gingerly !  Enjoyed ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You have found a loop hole in the rules as you have spoken that word loudly with out using the actual letters. Very cool my friend. well done. Full of the (L) word. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hello LngJhnAg - thank you for your comments, and perhaps manic is more accurate that prolific. Btw what does the Ag stand for. I think I've worked out the rest?MMoonchild - thank you I couldn't compete with your verse so wrote parody instead. I agree we all need to hear that word. I had a partner who when, I would say "I love you" would say "me too". Marge - Thank you I thought sidestepping was the point. Mark - Thanks the rules didn't say I couldn't imply the word. (I checked )just that I couldn't say it.Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ahhhhhyes my friend but you didn't just imply it....you SHOUTED IT OUT LOUD in your poetic wisdom and talent. Still loving it much. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mark - Moi? 8-D Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
kethry...I am so sorry that its taken me so long to find your poem...and what a wonderful response to my challenge...I too have had partners unable to say THAT WORD...you say it very well...I think this says exactly what I was thinking... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula - I wasn't worried, I knew you'd find it. - After all I dropped enough hints. Thank you for your response to my poem. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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MysticalNights Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 112Oklahoma |
This is a great poem! I'll admit, I am one of those that has trouble with that word. Even if I feel it, and want to say it, sometimes it just won't come out. Touching work. "L"'d it!! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thank you Mystical Nights for being so honest. Thanks for the comment also. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Love this Love this Love this "whew" there...looks like i have no problem with the "L" word! great job, as usual! ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dawn thanks for the bump. I loved that you loved it. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kethry...I haven't seen Paula's challange but enjoyed this poem...you know, it's much better to feel the word and not say it, then to say it and not mean it...but you know that. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I know. thanks Martie. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
Kethry ~ Like this very much.. this word is so abused and told untruthfully way too much.. and for me it holds such a special meaning,,, well done .. Steve B |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
K* Awesome!! This flowed so smoothly and it's amazing how many things can describe ONE little word...and means so many different things to so many~ Fantastic work! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Steve B thanks for the bump. Everytime I think this poem has gone it comes back to haunt me. Thanks for your kind words. BDC. It means a lot to hear you utter such kindness. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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