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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia

0 posted 2000-08-26 10:16 AM


Sorry Paula the poem got to me before I got to bed, so here 'tis, of sorts.

I care for you, yes I do
truly, deeply madly
but if you want to hear that word
I will turn away so sadly

I want you and I need you
it's you, I'll always trust
but, I stumble with that word
so could we be in lust

I yearn for you, when you sleep
I'll hold you tenderly
with waves of affection deep,
visible, enough to see

I will take you for my wife
and stay eternally
but if want me without strife
don't ask that word from me

I miss your voice so true and clear
when you go away
and I'll give you passions cheer
if you choose to stay

I'll work hard to provide
everything you need
we can raise a family
beginning with my seed

but please don't ask that word of me
my lips will never say
those little words you long to hear
though my heart is old and gray

Accept what I can offer
my soul I give to you
although I cannot tell you
its promises are true


© Copyright 2000 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
1 posted 2000-08-26 10:48 AM


Kethry - Man - you are prolific!  This is a terrific response to the challenge.  Spoken with real insight.  And written really well.
MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
PA
2 posted 2000-08-26 12:10 PM


Kethry

although I (love) your poem...I (love) the L word and need to hear it....I think everyone  wants to along with the actions
~~softly (loving) this challenge
Maureen

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Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 2000-08-26 05:55 PM


Kethry~
I think you 'side-stepped' the issue gingerly !

Enjoyed !
~*Marge*~


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Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
4 posted 2000-08-26 05:59 PM


You have found a loop hole in the rules as you have spoken that word loudly with out using the actual letters.  Very cool my friend.  well done.  Full of the (L) word.
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
5 posted 2000-08-26 07:57 PM


Hello LngJhnAg - thank you for your comments, and perhaps manic is more accurate that prolific.   Btw what does the Ag stand for. I think I've worked out the rest?

MMoonchild - thank you I couldn't compete with your verse so wrote parody instead. I agree we all need to hear that word. I had a partner who when, I would say "I love you" would say "me too".

Marge - Thank you I thought sidestepping was the point.

Mark - Thanks the rules didn't say I couldn't imply the word. (I checked  )just that I couldn't say it.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2000-08-26 08:00 PM


ahhhhhyes my friend but you didn't just imply it....you SHOUTED IT OUT LOUD in your poetic wisdom and talent.  Still loving it much.
Kethry
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Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
7 posted 2000-08-26 08:19 PM


Mark - Moi? 8-D
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri
8 posted 2000-08-29 10:48 PM


kethry...I am so sorry that its taken me so long to find your poem...and what a wonderful response to my challenge...I too have had partners unable to say THAT WORD...you say it very well...I think this says exactly what I was thinking...
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
9 posted 2000-08-30 06:24 AM


Paula - I wasn't worried, I knew you'd find it. - After all I dropped enough hints.  
Thank you for your response to my poem.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

MysticalNights
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since 2000-05-17
Posts 112
Oklahoma
10 posted 2000-08-30 06:34 AM


This is a great poem!  I'll admit, I am one of those that has trouble with that word.  Even if I feel it, and want to say it, sometimes it just won't come out.  Touching work.  "L"'d it!!
Kethry
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Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
11 posted 2000-08-30 08:37 AM


Thank you Mystical Nights for being so honest.
Thanks for the comment also.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
12 posted 2000-08-31 08:07 AM


Love this
Love this
Love this
"whew"
there...looks like i have no problem with the "L" word!
great job, as usual!
~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
13 posted 2000-08-31 08:12 AM


Dawn thanks for the bump. I loved that you loved it.

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Martie
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Posts 28049
California
14 posted 2000-08-31 10:33 AM


Kethry...I haven't seen Paula's challange but enjoyed this poem...you know, it's much better to feel the word and not say it, then to say it and not mean it...but you know that.
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
15 posted 2000-08-31 10:36 AM


I know. thanks Martie.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Steve B
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 140
Southern PA
16 posted 2000-09-01 05:23 PM


Kethry ~ Like this very much.. this word is so abused and told untruthfully way too much.. and for me it holds such a special meaning,,, well done .. Steve B  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
17 posted 2000-09-01 05:37 PM


K* Awesome!! This flowed so smoothly and
it's amazing how many things can describe
ONE little word...and means so many
different things to so many~ Fantastic work!

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
18 posted 2000-09-01 05:53 PM


Steve B thanks for the bump. Everytime I think this poem has gone it comes back to haunt me. Thanks for your kind words.

BDC. It means a lot to hear you utter such kindness.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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