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The dawn rising.
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The dawn rising. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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You seem so strange to me, a apple of temptation, a reflection of my darkest secrets, you have prised open Pandora's box but I safely resting here. This brutal touch you spoke of has me entranced, I want to experience nakedness and fear, progress to a womb state in a garden of wolves, they will prey on me but never to kill. You seem so distant, yet so close each word draws us deeper, and this game we are playing will it strip us of our chains, bind us together or strangle us in extremity? You have spoken of words unknown spun by darkest desires, I may defy God but I will defy myself into submission? You hold out your hands a poison apple in one palm and the searing truth in the other. The price of life is death and pleasure is pain, Christ will verify to this accord. Within these boundaries it is easy to lash out, spit kick and bleed. Within hidden confides the safety net is loaded, but when these times are whipped away Will we still dare to asphyxiate in the chains of deep thorn caresses? What crimson crimes lie in the new dawn rising? ============= "I will protect you and shield you, prevent you from danger You've intruded and taken away all my sweetness" I care by Mansun. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Brian. Very well done. Denise |
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DestinysCharm Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 90 |
Brian, What thoughts you exhibit here in this poem, I am blown away. Great job you are a very excellent writer being able to make the reader grasp what you are saying and bring them to wonder about it all at the end. Fabulous way to make an impression  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brian, you are truly magnificent in your writing skills... the images just seem to belong to you... and you just know how much images mean to me... Life is a metaphor and you, my friend, seem to be an ever-radiant, exuberant, brave, et al, explorer... regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow Brian! These words took me in, and left me thunderstruck! Powerful writing, and incredible imagery. Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Brian, well I tell you something, I'm truly amazed with this one! I hope you are pursuing your writing. You have a great potential. Kathleen |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
im speachless (as usual), but i guess that can still speak volumes! and of course i agree with all the other replies....youre just too good! *grin* ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Denise, thank you for your very generous comments. DestinysCharm, I am blushing absolutely bown away by your response, thank you these words mean a lot to me. thanks again. Sudhir, really I don't know what to say. It is always a pleasure to read your responses, your caring words, I am eternally gratefully for this and for your support. Kit, thank you for your wonderful response. Kathleen, I am spreading my wings slowly, testing the waters but will have to devote more time to pursuing poetry. Thank you for the encouragement and very generous words. Dawn, it is in silence that we allow our thoughts to blossom. Thank you, and you are too kind. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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