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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2000-08-25 11:34 PM


the homeward lark spun through the snow,
among the diamond-falling, dead, cold,
dead-called, from the sky.

the pull of insistent curtain wet
plunged its wings in iceless rain,
feathers knit and unknit.

bird beak opened to the sun
and a small trickle of gemstone hew
as it lay among the roots of the earth.


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2000-08-26 12:27 PM


feathers knit and unknit...sigh...so goes the days of our lives....and yes, may we LOL...and what a bitter fruit that is to bite of....but healthy...what I want to know is why does healthy have to taste like ----?

And of course, I'll hug Janet, twice, thrice, as much as we need, (((((Janet)))))

AVANTI
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2 posted 2000-08-26 12:38 PM


breif and very well written

If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise?
Avanti Rao



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3 posted 2000-08-27 03:02 PM


This poem speakes to me with the power you held within. Simply superb!!!!  

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Sunnyone
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4 posted 2000-08-27 03:12 PM


bsquirrel...
            Very captivating poetry....I enjoyed the read and imagery.

Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



brian madden
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5 posted 2000-08-27 03:27 PM


B Squirrel, amazing images painted with such clarity. This poem is breathtaking,

"I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy

bsquirrel
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6 posted 2000-08-27 04:07 PM


Thanks, everyone. The poem title comes from the fact I wrote this at work while the boss is away, and she told me before that writing poetry is a "fireable offense." (check back to "the day creativity took a powder" for that story)

Mike

Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 2000-08-27 04:10 PM


Amazing imagery and we wont tell her.LOL...Very enjoyable read.
bsquirrel
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8 posted 2000-09-01 01:03 AM


Mark,
Oh, you can tell her.  

Mike

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