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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
AriseAloft into the day's advance o'er deepest grass of green aloft we now, toward this dance of currents unforseen Aflight, awake and heathering upon the morning's wave aflight, the dawn lies feathering across a narrow grave Above, a pheasant frees the wing as heavy lies the earth Above, a hundred angels sing rejoiced in brilliant birth Arise, an infant's soaring soul leaves mother to her grief Arise, anew, and duly whole beyond the brutal thief |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are amazing, how you write such sadness and couple it with hope, and so beautifully...sighs from me...I aspire...arise? I'll think about that...smiles, claire. |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Dear Claire, Such heart breaking sadness I read here. I'm at a loss for words, my friend. Michael |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Few people can write such sadness so beautifully. You are indeed amazing! Denise |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I have heard an angel sing tonight... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire-- I can only say how touched I am by your writing and thank you for sharing your words. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
serenity, thank you for the smiles... Michael, yes, I know...and I understand... Denise, so kind you are...thank you Mike, the Heavens do seem to be alive tonight...thank you, my friend. ~ Claire< !signature--> Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 08-26-2000).] |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
What a moving piece here, Claire...you are one of the few poets I know of that can rhyme so wonderfully and make it seem so effortless. And of course, the emotion, the depth of your words is first rate, as always.  *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, just beautiful. . . I stand in awe of your gift. . . just wonderful my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, Borrowed from one of my poems, "darkness runs on little feet and in the shadows hides." True hope casts no shadows and light pushes darkness away. Please forgive this second post. Michael |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Claire, the word stunning comes to mind, but it does not seem enough this poem is absolutely amazing....I am blown away. Arise, an infant's soaring soul leaves mother to her grief Arise, anew, and duly whole beyond the brutal thief "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Your tenderest moment touches me ~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Krista, I know of nothing more gratifying than to be told that one's literary work seems effortless. To me, that is one of the highest forms of praise. If you were to read your own work through the eyes of others, I believe you would percieve something very similar. Thank you, my friend. Sven, what I find wonderful is the gentle nature of your words, both in poem and response. Thank you... Michael, I thank you, dear, for your wee hour thoughts, as always. I am trying to remember another of your poems that also aligns with the theme of light pushing darkness. I have forgotten now, but will review and refresh. (Imagine that...me, forgetting something!) Brian, I gratefully accept your "stunning" as a very generous and kind compliment. Thank you, Brian, for such giving words to me. Miss Marge, I know that you are always moved by tenderness, a quality that I love about you. I nearly deleted this poem, as, in review, feared that it might be upsetting to some, due to its subject matter, but as a very dear friend reminded me last night, "You don't delete your feelings." My thanks to you on this new morning. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Claire - one of the characteristics of your poem that really struck me is your choice of words - they walk such an incredibly fine line between what could have been used and not worked, and what was used and worked beautifully. Each time it occurred, I was amazed at how perfectly the word you chose fit. Does that make sense to you? Every verse seemed.... right. This is a terrific poem. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Claire, I am close to being speechless. This has to be one of the most beautiful worded poems I have ever read. You are an amazing poet. rp25 |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
LngJhnAg, I thank you, in earnest, for taking such a close look at this poem, and for the eloquence with which you express your viewpoint. And of course, for the "terrific." Your words make perfect sense to me. rosepetals, thank you for such a candid and encouraging response. I do appreciate you letting me know that you enjoyed this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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