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unprompted poetry (session one)
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unprompted poetry (session one) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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until i died, i never knew your beauty, earth. you clothe yourself in trees and water, sprinkle souls like jade on a stone walk glistening in sunny rain. it's a shame i couldn't live again. until i died, i was remade (with pieces missing). i miss your gentle insisting that i will make you move. some time has gone. i cannot retrieve the burned chalk from the rising fire. kiss me, liar, and i will wear your rings, and your distant exclamations of grief. i'm your relief. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, an intriguing piece...one that just "sounds" so good read aloud, thanks to your subtle rhyme and gentle rhythmic lines. Your mind intrigues my own at times.  ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
unusual for me - I read this thru 3 times - and liked it better with each reading - very well done |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
session one? smiles...now you know I will nag you for two...this is so you...I do so love your mind...that too, is "serenity-approved"---love ya muchly, m'friend. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Meadowmuse, Thanks. I wrote this on a tape cover to a friend for no real reason. Hence the title. It works though, despite itself. W.Y., If Bill the Cat approves of something, I'm either doing really well or have left reality entirely. S'en, Let the nagging begin! Always glad to see ya. And give Janet a hug for me, okay?Mike |
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