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Parallel Dreams |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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(rewrite of a 3/98 poem) I want to take you in my arms, Totally fold up all your charms We should be dancing the night away. In some small romantic cabaret Or floating on some peaceful stream, Where we can share our favorite scheme I see you as a lovely dream, A rare and captivating theme You are dressed all in white, Standing out in the night Starlight shines bright in your eyes, Diamonds give your hair disguise The music pervades the velvet night air; We sway to the tune without any care The breeze carries the tune, soft in our ears; Blowing and drying wet happy tears It traces over us, cooling our skin, Tune changes tempo, Beguine we begin Recalling passion we felt at the start; Strange how it changed to be felt in the heart Our dreams then continue in mime, You in your bed and I in mine Parallel dreams that we have, o'er the miles; Sustaining, maintaining, making our smiles Thus our hearts are joining in flight, Coursing with the moon in the night Is it fair we're bound by commitments old? Commitments made that our partners leave cold? On a cool spring night, dream feeling washing So lovely the theme, no heart for smashing Content to find you, in my dream safe held Loving to be there, my heart you've corralled |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
absolutely amazed at this. so clever parallel dreams. Dreams feel so real. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Two heart thoughts so entwined can build a bridge from dreams devine Lovely romantic poem, Bill... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is even more lovely than when I read it the first time...What lovely thoughts you have penned |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Rosebud- I was looking at the original (I was still a neophyte) - it was such a mess - but the idea still had value to me so I struggled to give it 'flow' - I'm glad you liked  Martie - There is absolutely nothing I like better than a poetic response thank you so muchPaula- I'm glad you thought it worth a second reading. My humble thanks.  |
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