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They Closed Loves Door
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They Closed Loves Door |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
They Closed Loves Door He says he’d be better off without her by his side So he moves his things out, another place he’ll reside They’ve had their problems throughout the years They’ve had some good times, but they’ve shed many tears. They’re two different people, personalities not the same Just two different people, neither one of them to blame He didn’t want to be the one to say the final goodbye He would rather she do it cause he couldn’t stand to see her cry. She made her decision to do what she felt was right As much as she hated it with all her might But, if someone didn’t do it and do it really soon They’d end up hating each other and both be doomed. She wanted to end it while she could still remember the good As things were getting worse as she knew they would Her heart has been broken, but she’s not crying anymore As today she let him go, today she closed loves door. She wishes him the best throughout the rest of his life She wishes him happiness, no sorrow or strife It’s sad to see love die, but they can’t take it anymore Today, a sad day as they closed loves door. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
susan~ Firstly let me  WELCOME YOU TO PASSIONS Now to your greatly written poem... It is a very, very impressive first post... a touch on the sad side. I am sure many other poets/writers/readers here will echo what I said... Hope you enjoy your stay here... regards, sudhir |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Susan, welcome to passions. Your first post is sad but sweet. A great intoduction Dee |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Welcome to Passions!! I've been looking forward to your first post...your comments on my poems have been so kind that I couldn't wait to read yours. I'm not disappointed...I would say blown away would be the perfect phrase. The heart felt emotion in this piece radiates off the page...It's never an easy place to be and you penned the situation so acutely. Great entrance in to Passions and I look forward to many more~ |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
 wish I had written this..very nicely done ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Thank you all so very, very much for your kind words. I feel so much heart in everyone. Have enjoyed reading all of your beautiful words today and will watch for more. Thanks again for a wonderful welcome. |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Very well done Susan!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Susan, you've been so kind to read so many of my works, I ran around looking for your first post and here it is! O my friend, I am so sorry that this upheaval is what brought you here...but do, sit back, breathe, allow good thoughts to permeate your senses...and enjoy your much needed island of Passions... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Susan~~ I am so glad I found this post!!! That is 4 for 4 today that I can relate to is someone trying to tell me somehting up there??? well I loved this one....glad i didn't miss it...  Julie :) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Susan, this touched me. I am in a similar place. just a little behind. Wonderful writing. Take care. catalinamoon |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Welcome to Passions, Susan Your poem is sad and touching. I'm looking forward to reading more. ...chanson~~Que sera sera~ |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Sunshine - always look forward to your comments. Thank you as they mean so very, very much to me. JulieAnn - sorry to hear that it relates, yet hopefully you to can someday begin to close loves door. I'm still working on it. Thanks for your reply. English Rose - thanks for taking the time to reply. I'll be looking for your poetry. catalinamoon - Thanks a million. Hope your situation gets better also. God speed to you all. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ahhhhh- I knew I would find your first post sooner or later. Welcome to Passions and what a great one to start with. Your writing is superb and it is never easy when love of two grows in two different directions. IT is hard to keep the flame alive if the seperation of communication keeps a love a part. Really beautiful work here. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-30-2000).] |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Mark - yes, this was my first post and it was hard to write this one as it was an ending to a marriage that I didn't want to let go of. After several months of crying, I realized why do I want someone who does not want me. We all deserve to be loved as we love. 10 months have passed since my husband left and I'm now on my true way to recovery. Thank you again. Smiles! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice to read in your comments that sad times are getting better..I wanted to tell you many years ago it took me two years to come to the realization "why would I want to be with someone that didn't want to be with me." Lots of holding on and false hope and hurting before I came to that truth...and it gave me the strength to let go and go on...we all must find our personal strength to help us let go of the pain...so glad you have found yours...James |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
WOW!!!! First, to your first post being such a wonderful entrance...sad, indeed... I think there seems to be something in the internet waves these days...when I read these poems, I get so caught up in the writer's emotions. truly well-written, susan. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Diane Yvonne Junior Member
since 2000-08-22
Posts 36Camdenton,Mo. USA |
Susan, Sooooo Beautifully Sad, What you did takes alot of courage, but it seems you knew what was best for both of you,but getting to that point is very difficult. Best of luck, Diane |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Susan, obviously a difficult poem to write but a smooth read, emotions well expressed and the poems has class. Welcome to passions I look forward to reading more of your work. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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