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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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I guess if you can live with the lies then I can turn the sneer of my disrespect up side down for now but it is a dangerous game we play neither of us are bluffing and the ante is the breath we breathe [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 08-23-2000).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
woah! luvit.. a little chilly in here.... that's coooolld baby...!! great poem!! |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Very to the point... great line... "and the ante is the breath we breathe" Harsh!!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
GREAT work.... simply love reading your works... regards to you Corazon, sudhir |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
OUCH! this one stings hard!!!... geesh, girl! you have a way with some very strong words... and, as always, you do it with a style i absolutely LOVE! "then I can turn the sneer of my disrespect up side down for now but it is a dangerous game we play" great lines here... all of it... i wish i could write so MUCH in so few lines...this one is a winner!  as always, thanks for a great read(oh, btw, putting "up" on one line and "side" on the next was very effective...) |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks guys, you know I hate the fact that this coldness lives, but I am blessed to be able to turn it into a poem and thus purge it.....thank you for reading and responding |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ouch! Sounds like the stakes are the ones that go through the heart! Good work, Corazony one.... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks bal, and yep I like the way you put that..... |
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