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What became of me.
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What became of me. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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I see you over and over in my mind, Rolling one thought to the next you send me into a spin, Smell of your skin has me in a trance, How we meet was a lucky chance, Holding your hand close to my heart, The beating takes on its melodic rhythm I hold you tight afraid to let go, Wish I could pause this moment and bring it to a slow. So sensuous your beauty is to my eyes, You can look into them and see no lies, Intone with your soul I let loose my fears As I look on ahead to discover that my life is becoming clearer. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). [This message has been edited by Xeonox (edited 08-23-2000).] |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
My what a lovely poem  ..maybe I should ask what became of me as I read this piece lol..I thought of my love and what he has done to me and I thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And I ask this question while doing the laundry and the cat's in heat, and washing the dishes, and mating the socks...HEY...what HAS become of me? LOL... Your version is so much lovelier than mine...this was a mini-vacation for me...couldya tell? |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Xeonox, I ask myself that question all the time. Hehe. I like have to agree with serenity.. I like your version better! BTW.. I loved your response to the poem serenity..lol. rp25 |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Thank you for your comments people. I really do appericate them. You are my first readers of all my poems besides myself because I write them. LOL. What is your version called serenity? Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
How About---"I KNEW I left something on the back burner?" |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Thank you. I will go and read your poem. Ronil Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is so sweetly sensual...I really like it. |
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