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I Sit Here Missing You
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I Sit Here Missing You |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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I’d like to have a cabin, by a rushing mountain stream. With a lovely mountain meadow, I could lay upon and dream. I’d sit there by my window when the ground was deep with snow, And walk anew that memory lane, I trod so long ago. I guess the books deceived me, with their tales of love and bliss- I never would have thought that I, would wind up here like this. My memories of bygone days, a somber shadow cast- To make my future days look gray, and lonely as the past. I would walk along the stream there, in my mind you’re at my side. A victim long since left behind, by foolishness and pride. We’d talk about those children, dear; the ones we never had... When I see what pride has cost me, it leaves me, oh, so sad. I made my choices freely, and I guess I knew full well- The pathway that I chose to walk, could be a living hell... Somewhere I read, or someone said, “To thine ownself be true”- And so I’ve been, but in the end- I sit here missing you. Visit My Home Page http://www.geocities.com/montcogunslinger/Hompage.html |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, John. So very touching. Denise |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I would like to have a cabin by a rushing mountain stream...don't know if I could stand the missing part though...I would have to find a new girlfriend to enjoy the scenery with me...James |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
My dear Troubadour, this is why I love your verse so. Beautiful. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is just so achingly tender in its ponderous reminiscing...tightly written, and smooth as brandy...beautiful work, Mr. Gunslinger!!! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Great work, Gunslinger. I missed this before, but I'm glad I found it. Elizabeth |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Superb writing as usual, Gunslinger!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Slinger~ So tender is your 'ache'. You touch tender very well. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
this piece is truly wonderful...lovely emotion and imagery. i enjoyed this very much "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
you painted your picture so vividly in this one...every word had emotion...almost haunting reflection. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, this one touched me in a big way..I love the way you wrote it, and the sentiment is so true. I wish I did not understand it quite so well. Catalinamoon |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
This is very touching, Gunslinger. The ache and longing are felt. ...chanson~ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
wonderful bit of writing here! I'd like to have a cottage by the sea, to count the tides and dream of thee hehehe just my take on the wording (to get the cottage in there!)  ~Heather PS would you be very upset if I used this as an inspiration for a poem? [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
Thank all of you so very much. Heather, be my guest. Glad to be a source of inspiration for a change instead of exasperation. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Very sweet, touching poem. I'm adding this to my library. Dee |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This goes in my "favorites" file This is one of your best, but there are so many. A very beautiful poem, by the master of story telling Liz |
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