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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-08-22 10:56 PM


Another night
it's off to bed
persistant thought
of things unsaid
No unache
for aching head--
I tell me lies.
I say you're dead.
Loneliness
inside a tomb,
burning wax,
to war the gloom
and one for hope,
an embryo,
That I am love,
that yearns to grow,
these walls I kick--
a loving womb...
insistance taunts
the rise of bread.

I wish that you were here again.
I wish too much again my friend.

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Balladeer
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1 posted 2000-08-22 11:24 PM


beautiful, serenity...the perfect touch of longing and sadness...and perhaps regret. I would call it one of your best...
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
2 posted 2000-08-23 05:30 AM


If balladeer says so it is so...

but I would reserve the "best" word for something that will come ... for that is an aim, is it not...

O serene One, this is moving and exquisite in the way the whole sentiment is expressed... and that has been one of your hallmarks... A fantastic expressin of impression...

regards to you,
sudhir

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
3 posted 2000-08-23 07:33 PM


Friends are important in all phases of life hope that you get all that you wish for.
Rich

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