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Bird's Eye View |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374
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If I saw the world through a bird's eye view Would I see the world more like you Then would I know the reason why The reason why You make me cry If I should turn the other cheek Would you just laugh and call me weak And if I turned and walked away Would you throw Your stones my way If I wore your hat, your shirt, your shoes If looked a little bit more like you Then would you listen to my words Or would you just Make me hurt If I saw the world through a bird's eye view Then would I be as high as you Then would you smile and let me in Let me in inside your skin -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
i often wonder the same things myself....Nice work...  Julie :) |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
I love it, rising up to their level, then just maybe, anyway , greta writng!! Just me |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thanks JulieAnn!! and sarahC!!< !signature--> -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com [This message has been edited by ladysixstring (edited 08-22-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I have always found...where love is concerned....if we show our hurt...the other person looks upon us as weak and actually dispises the weakness in us...personal experiences...James |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
your poetry is very melodic... I've never been able to write songs that translate well without the music but you do it with ease...kudos to you Ladypoet.. Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"and if I could cry your tears for you would you hate me with intensity to the nth of the degree of which you hate yourself? sorry, loved this...couldn't resist... nice work here, lady.... |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
jaimie, thought provoking poem, but then most of yours I have read are. I loved it. Dee |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thank you jmlee12345, Local Rebel and Dee!!< !signature--> -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com [This message has been edited by ladysixstring (edited 08-22-2000).] |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Glad you didn't resist serenity. It's so true! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
What a melodic poem....I am sure you could set this one to music!! |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Jaimie, Our hearts so hunger to be kissed and yours is no exception. This is very nice work. Michael |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Ladysixstring "Bird's Eye View" was a very interesting title to this one. Your verses just flowed as I read it. Very melodic and rhythmic. Garfield |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I really loved your POV here. Birdseye view...great way to see it. Lovely piece. Be interested in your dreams...see "How Do You Dream" and join the party. jwesley |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Once again, guys, you are always too kind!! Thank you!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That is very pretty Ladysixstring ..... If I saw the world through a bird's eye view I could drop in to read poetry by you. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent as always. . . Think that I have my wings all ready. . . Just wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
ethome, that's sweeter than it is cute... and it pretty cute!!! Thanks! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thank you Sven!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well you are one sweet song writer. I loved it. and I would no doubt let you in. Do you have a pic on your site playing your guitar. What do you play? Parker |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Wonderful writing! .... as always... enjoyed much! |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thanks dorreen, you are always so sweet. Oh, and yes, I'm sloooow at these things but I saw your name in the club membership today! Thanks!!! Haleyja, unfortunately, I don't have a picture of me and Honey together yet. She's a Schecter TSH-1 Semi-Hollow Body Electric. Oh, is she sweet!! In fact, I never touch the others anymore. Here's a link to her alone... http://www.ladysixstring.com/images/honey.jpg -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nice, Jaimie! Denise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
wonderful verse and brings to passing all the loves that flare then bolt. Slow giving in time with growing respect is always best. loved it. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Wow, she is sweet, that is one nice looking guitar. I've never seen one around the shops I go to, but I think i'll keep an eye open now to check one out. Parker |
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