How we touch(senryu style)

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Open Poetry #9

How we touch(senryu style)

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-08-01 01:10 PM

Hands that caress wind
bringing winters completion
completing silence.

Hands with given skin
untold pleasure that arise
the heart is now one.

Fingers upon lips
of wanting that moments touch
we begin anew.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2000-08-01 01:47 PM

Nicely done! Enjoyed

jwesley

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

2 posted 2000-08-01 01:47 PM

I love your first verse. Your choice of words for imagery is amazing. Very effective indeed.

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-08-01 05:11 PM

your words be divine
sends a shiver down my spine
poetic touch so fine

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

Jenn E
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada

4 posted 2000-08-23 06:57 PM

Thank you for clearing up what a senryu was. lol.
This was very tender. So much said in such few lines. Your words will forever amaze me.
Jenn E

ladysixstring
Member

since 2000-07-27

Posts 374

5 posted 2000-08-23 08:31 PM

Beautiful style... I love the first line "Hands that caress wind" Wow!! These two take a close second... "Fingers upon lips
of wanting that moments touch"

-jaimie

Website: www.ladysixstring.com

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite

since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

6 posted 2000-08-23 10:44 PM

you have mastered the Senryu - I hope to read more of them - well done ~S~

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