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Remembrances from yesterdays - Part 2 - Park revisited
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Remembrances from yesterdays - Part 2 - Park revisited |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Remembrances from yesterdays - Part 2 "Park revisited" My thoughts went for a walk Through the green woods Where we once were; They recalled the talks - Memory's canned goods - We had once shared. Touched the park bench Where you and I - We once sat hand in hand; Felt the crimsoned bench Where you and I - We met eyes' gazed demands. Smelled the fragrant air Where you and I - We once had an innocent kiss. Tasted freshness of the air Where you and I - We once had a moment of bliss. They now walk in the woods Alone looking around, And just remembering, The times that once stood Stilled in its ground, Now gone with steps faltering! ~ [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"Memories canned goods" is a terrific line...sort of like my "replaying tapes in my head" analogy. Good stuff, Sudhir! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
so this is the romantic side of Sudhir ... you devil, you ... well done ... We once sat hand in hand; Felt the crimsoned bench |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sudhir Iyer, Ah my friend, romance is in the air. Well done, your skills are excellent, your thoughts moving, and your pen worthy. A fine writing. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, I found myself musing around that line for a few minutes when I wrote this poem... started off more like a ramble but ended up in the current form ... and you say good stuff... I am delighted... thanks. Thanks a lot... MA, devil, am I? nice to know  I try a bit to be a jack of all... Thanks for stopping by...Bill, WOW, thats a huge compliment... I will keep that close to my chest (ahem... can) of memories... regards to all, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ahhhh the sweet touch of romance from a gentle pen ... beautiful Sudhir ... and resulted in a wonderful sigh from this reader!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks for reading, sighing and responding, Kit... means a lot... regards, sudhir |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Beautiful very very beautiful. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brian, Thanks and Many regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful Sudhir! Wonderful reflections of a love still active though not complete. Love the steps faltering line.....keep up the good work....looking for part three. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, Thanks a lot for coming in... part 3 might be a bit away... never planned for a part 3... anyway, lets see... Regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, A very warm and enjoyable read. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Seymour, I am glad that you enjoyed... Thank You regards, sudhir |
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Jenova Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 16germany |
So I gotta see who posted all these nice replies... and wow... I found a jewel... I adore the way you create these images... you could almost taste the fresh air... feel the crimsoned bench... beautiful. Jenova |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I really enjoyed this piece of work....it kind of reminded me of something Robert Frost (by the way one of my favorite poets) might have written What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us. ~Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jenova, you are being too kind... Thanks... Ruth, I am so glad that you enjoyed... Robert Frost is one of my favourites too... reasons well known... but to be compared to that class of writing is a bit too much for me to gulp in a sip... thanks for your lovely compliments... regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-02-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sudhir, your work is consistently unique. I love your "Memory's canned goods" metaphor here, and your reference to the differences in the passage of time. "And just remembering, The times that once stood Stilled in its ground," This is sad, beautiful writing, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Claire, Thanks a great deal for your fine compliments... regards, sudhir |
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