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MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13

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0 posted 2000-08-01 10:54 AM

Dent de Lion

There you were, golden maned
popping up everywhere I looked
as I leaned back yesterday,
enjoying the warmth of an after rain.

Drawing me to you, I plucked you
from the meadows, beside the stream
brushed you lightly against my cheek
surprised at your softness,
and how delicate you really were.

All my life you were but a weed
though cosmopolitan, and to some
an herb, producing a dandy wine
to drink or as is, edible to feast upon.

I eyed you, held you, played with you
studied your strong stem
your little hairs, fine tuned
breathed in scent of sweetness.

Why was I so surprised...
sensing your want of acceptance?
Yesterday, you received mine.
I kissed you with my lips and you
left your tracings of gold upon them.

A weed no more, I see the beauty in you.

M
4*2k

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2000-08-01 11:10 AM

Now you have gone and made me feel guilty for all the weeding I have done.

Wonderful vision you rest upon what most ignore. Great read.

MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13

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2 posted 2000-08-01 11:26 AM

Mark I am still working on that heart..I had a very bad day and a half so I couldnt concentrate..also..I wrote this in the spring and it was the first day after many rains and the sun was out and I went and sat on my sisters porch waiting for her..shut my eyes then opened to see one dandelion standing tall....I went over and picked it and stared at it and studied it closely then shut my eyes and dreamed a bit then had to run to the car for a pad and pen as this flowed out of me.....I have another from that day I will post..but have to look it over first to make sure it is appropriate for here then I will complete your heart for you
~~soft smiles
Maureen

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

3 posted 2000-08-01 11:31 AM

Maureen--honestly...forget the heart. The format it is in now actually lends to the piece a little as I have been shown. I appreciate your dedication to this but it really is not worth the time and effort. The words were heard and that is what is most important...not the graphics. Thanks

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

4 posted 2000-08-02 07:48 AM

I tend to disagree with Mark Bohannan to a degree, presentation is part of the overall enjoyment. Ask any chef, they'll tell you that is correct for cooking, and it applies to poetry as well.
MMoonchild, a fine piece of open poetry.

Gloom

MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13

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5 posted 2000-08-02 01:40 PM

thank you Gloom for your professional opinions

~~softly thinking
Maureen

[This message has been edited by MMoonchild (edited 08-03-2000).]

poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06

Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia

6 posted 2000-08-02 01:48 PM

the dandelion filled my childhood days...always found it beautiful and very glad to see someone turn it into such a lovely poem!

MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13

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7 posted 2000-08-03 12:38 PM

poutprincess...that particular beautiful day the dandelion up close was really quite beautiful and it's design fascinated me...a very unique flower of sorts
~~softly thanking you for the visit and words
Maureen

[This message has been edited by MMoonchild (edited 08-05-2000).]

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