Open Poetry #9 |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC ![]() |
I saw him at the seashore, Where he now spent his days, His skin was aged and wrinkled, His eyes a hollow gaze. A moment he took to ask me, How far it was I walked? And with a weary smile, asked, “You have a few to talk?” He said I looked just like her One he loved so long ago, But fearing she’d prove unfaithful He had chosen to let her go. He told me of his children; Two, he had, like mine, Who never called or visited For they never found the time. And in this conversation, The part that made me sad, Was that his heart was broken, But he said, “It’s not so bad.” He tried, but couldn’t fool me. I saw it in his eyes — Regret and bitter sorrow; The many tears he cried. He’d lived unto a ripe old age, Safe within his shell, Trading love and happiness For a lonely life in hell. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Brandyn: we all have some encounters like this at one time or another...I had one, but that's another poem. This is a great piece of work in my eyes, and in my heart...I am also sad for this man and for you too...it's hard being the one people talk to sometimes. ~shadows dance by the light within~ |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How poignant. Very nicely told story. So sad when life goes like that. Catalinamoon |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You have woven a heartbreaking tale into poetry...I can see this all so clearly...wonderfully penned~ |
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Janie Member
since 2000-08-13
Posts 158 |
A story told well. "But fearing she'd prove unfaithful" I can relate to that. I'm happily married now, but before I met my husband there was a guy I was CRAZY about. You know the kind of sensation you get when you accidently touch someone and a volt of electricity travels through your body that you both can feel? That's how it was, but this fear you write of is one reason of many that I let go. The only problem is I never had any closure on the end of the "relationship" which has always left me curious "what" it was he said he'd one day tell me, "if you're lucky", he said, after the electric touch occurred. In later years I wrote a poem about my question entitled "Electric Love" which I'll post in the forum. Good work! |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC |
Thank you, P.S., Cat and B.D.C. for the compliments. I was inspired to write this after a failed relationship. The man had such an intense fear that I would change somehow if our relationship were to grow into something serious. This is how I see him in a few years if he refuses to take a chance for the sake of love. And, yes, that will be very sad indeed. And, Janie, I’m off to go find your piece right now. ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Brandyn~ A beautiful write. The story is capturing .... and sad. Sometimes it happens. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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