Open Poetry #9 |
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Little Flower Girl |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas ![]() |
Little flower girl, With flowers in your hair Selling flowers on the street But noone seemed to care. You'd plait them into crowns, Those flowers that you sold; You might've been a poor flower girl But your heart was purest gold. Little flower girl, Selling flowers in the park; Tip-toeing past the sleeping winos Walking until after dark. With you basket full of flowers, Wilted flowers five days old, You might've been a poor flower girl But your heart was purest gold. Little flower girl, Found dead on the street. All her change was missing Broken flowers by her feet. They found the man that did it, Who left you bleeding in the cold. And though he took your life he left Your heart of purest gold Alicat |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ali, this turned out sad ![]() I love the ending to this though...left your heart of purest gold. Great writing! <*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
AC this was sad... very well done.... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Heart ripping tragedy...senseless but aren't they all. Powerful writing Ali~ |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Becky, Tori, BDC: Thank you. Just wrote about a picture in my head. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
So sad... Maybe you should invite this guy to your house... "welcome mat" and all!! Well, I'm off to find a happy poem to cheer myself up... no choice... I'm out of tissue and my sleeve is getting wet. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Alicat~ This is very sad ... drew a picture in my head ... Nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Reminds me that beauty is needed in a world of ugliness, in poetry, our deeds, our compassion and our empathy. A wonderful piece. Kathleen |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
OMG, that hurt... so much.. so sharp... I am now filled with feelings of disgust... What a great poem this is.... so well written... highlighting real ugliness and cruelty of life... regards, sudhir |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
LadySix and Marge: Thank you both. This wasn't originally meant to be a 'tear-jerker', but it kinda wrote itself. Irish Rose: I totally agree with you, and thank you for reading. Sudhir: Yes, it highlights the ugliness and cruelty of life, but also the untarnished soul of innocence. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is great writing, yep, sad, but still great ..... ![]() |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Fine poetry, well written. Enjoyed the read. |
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