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and they danced |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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and they danced they danced so effortlessly so gracefully and their fluid movement made me swoon they danced and you smiled caught my gaze as i tried to turn away tried to ignore they danced magically softly their rhythm striking the song so familiar and they danced oh, how they danced those words off your silver tongue but like the wallflowers i went home alone < !signature--> What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us. ~Ralph Waldo Emerson [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Ruth - what a wonderful way you teased me with this poem - leading me on, guiding me to visualize a couple dancing close together, swaying in time, perfected choreography - and then sliding the image over to show me, instead, a single woman gently rebuffing an advance (or perhaps, many advances). You are so clever that way - great writing, Ruth. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a beautiful twist your words took on in the conclusion Ruth ... just lovely!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi hoot_owl_rn, Ahh, I have read another of your writings, and I need to read more. You have a graceful way of writing, and going home alone? Not the someone that I see in that photo! |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Oh how I love this line... "and they danced oh, how they danced those words off your silver tongue" but why... why... why... "but like the wallflowers i went home alone" This was very good. I kept anticipating the what... who... was dancing? "words" how wonderful!!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
um..hootie... you're supposed to go home with him...!!! well written....hope you're well |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Ruth as always everytime you post a poem is a joyous occasion. A beautifully written poem, a sad twist but I am sure you you will find your own dancing partner. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ruth* Bittersweet...those silver words have a way of turning to cold steel......You've penned it so well~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ruth, another gem in the making, flowing perfectly... the sad twist just seemed to add to the lustre of the poem... regards, sudhir |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sad, poignant, and true to life. Not everyone gets the {fill in noun} at the end of the {fill in literary genre}. Me likes. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot~ I do like the way this one danced ... wonderfully complete. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh...I love this!! very cool presentation Hoot-girl... and I love the bittersweet emotions... so well expressed thru the metaphors so glad to see you posting again with us. later-two-step-gator  jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone for the comments. This came to me on the way home from work this morning. I guess this poem is one that can be read several ways...some of you mentioned the sadness of her going home alone, but I myself see a very strong woman in this poem who's not foolish enough to fall for the lines. Although she is moved by his lines, and has to put herself in check a time or two, it's an old song and dance she's heard a thousand times over and she realizes it as just that. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Either way its still a lovely dance with a twist |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Hi Ruth...yes, sometimes we must turn down the dance, depending upon the gentleman's intentions, and what a clever, artistic way of portraying just that. Wonderful writing, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is great! A thought provoking poem full of imagery..I love it.  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
What a wonderful twist at the end.....your use of metaphors was superb and the welllll.....the ending was just one of pure excellence. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sometimes wallflowers are the best way to go |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Wow the ending took me by surprise. Loved it. Juls |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
and how they dance Really enjoyed this one HOOT Regards, Coco |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Ruth--Nice to see you...I love to dance, but dancing with the wrong person can be a nightmare...better to keep your own company.... Like the way you portrayed this scene...excellent writing, of course! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The master of metaphors, or is it mistress? No, mistress doesn't sound right either. How about - the queen of metaphors, the words that dance so beautifully from your pen. I don't know how you pull this off. But it is fascinating Liz |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Yes! Yes! Yes! You have to know I would love something like this. It's perfect! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ruth I hope this isn't the state of affairs you're in now.? I love the line...oh, how they danced those words off your silver tongue Sometimes it's best to go home alone. Usually when we hear those lines, it's always best to go home alone! I loved this one! HUGS |
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Knight Dreams Junior Member
since 2000-08-16
Posts 46Austin, Texas |
Graceful and beautiful Ruth. You grow stronger every day |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Smiling here....thank you everyone for your comments...and no, this does not reflect my state of affairs at present, but I think it does posess some of my strength. It was just something that came to me and I had to go with it |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful writing, Ruth! Love it! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Lovely, Hoot!! *S* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
love it when the good ones dance back around so I can cut in to say well done! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Sunshine and Suthern |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Oh my! I do like this! Funny, I don't quite swoon when watching others dance, but I sway. Well written, love your style. Debra |
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