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Corazon
Senior Member

since 2000-02-02

Posts 1209

0 posted 2000-08-18 04:30 PM

first there were
four
but one was haunted
by ghosts no one could see
and she stepped into
the shadows
to hide
and we lost her
and then there were
three
one married money
and bred more by hanging
an attorney sign
above his name
and then there were
two
one just couldn't function
sanely
in a world without bars
and rules
and so he pulled the trigger
on a cop
to leave no doubt that
he would have some
and then there was one
and she dreams of wings
and she dreams of flight
but to the ground
she clings tight
she is afraid to let go
she is afraid of the shadows
the money
the bars and
its not so much the flight
she tells herself
its the eventual not knowing
how to land
crash and burn that bothers
her the most
and she is afraid
to look to the sky
for one
two
and
three

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

1 posted 2000-08-18 05:26 PM

intruiging....to say the least...like looking through sunglasses into a dark room... I can almost see, but then I can't... shadows, and passion Corazon...

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

2 posted 2000-08-18 05:29 PM

This has so much hidden power in it... WOW
particularly liked the expressions

one married money
and bred more
...
one just couldn't function
sanely
in a world without bars
and rules
...
and she is afraid
to look to the sky
for one
two
and
three

WONDERFUL work, Corazon

regards,
sudhir

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

3 posted 2000-08-18 05:33 PM

damn, girl! geesh... you write the depths of everything... this is awesome.. these lines are a song and i'm shaking my head again, just like you.... you're too good, my friend

"and then there was one
and she dreams of wings
and she dreams of flight
but to the ground
she clings tight
she is afraid to let go
she is afraid of the shadows"

if i wrote this, i'd be way beyond shadows... great work, k!! L)

Corazon
Senior Member

since 2000-02-02

Posts 1209

4 posted 2000-08-21 09:48 AM

wow to you guys! you make me feel really good, thank you so much for your comments

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

5 posted 2000-08-21 10:31 AM

and then there was one, who writes such beautiful poetry, that is so grounded in life and always smacks of a good wow.

Parker

Corazon
Senior Member

since 2000-02-02

Posts 1209

6 posted 2000-08-21 01:50 PM

thank you parker...it is good to see you....I haven't been around much, and then I haven't seen much from you either...so its a double missing you......

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2000-08-21 02:06 PM

But heavens, does that one ever have power!! Thumbs up from the shadow without substance. *S*

Corazon
Senior Member

since 2000-02-02

Posts 1209

8 posted 2000-08-21 02:09 PM

good to see you lady

and thank you much

did you get my last mail, I can send you a cd...we could get that a bit in that dinosaur's mouth yet

and hey, ms. no substance....if you got thumbs you got substance...and no arguing........you got more substance than I will ever hope to have....miss you girl

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 08-21-2000).]

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2000-08-21 02:10 PM

Love this one... a lot of roads of love travelled here and the gaurd has gone up but the desire is still there...and then there was one...very good!!

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