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Loud and Lovely Survival
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Loud and Lovely Survival |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A great and ever present reason in the still gives me strength to be trusting. In the color of love I see the bright and rounding moon and in goodness I see beginnings. I have capsized again and again in oceans that took my breathe. I found myself in white capped splendor negotiating with my insanity a personal flotation device meant for drowning souls. It took me past the catch in my throat pulsing with a heart song, down into a safely place that enfolded my lonely wretchedness twisted it like French ribbon rippled it to clarity and brought it back like fabric tossed with bounce sweet smelling and new. Listen, in the story is survival faltered and failed, bleeding from times listing wooden boat, but loud and lovely with survival. and when I looked for what I'd lost I found poetry still fresh and lithe and new in its amazement. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
this entire piece is exceptionally written.. you are such a fine writer... one of the very best on this site and i wanted to tell you here how much i admire your work, if i haven't already done so... these lines are particularly engaging to me: "I have capsized again and again in oceans that took my breathe. I found myself in white capped splendor negotiating with my insanity a personal flotation device meant for drowning souls." i haven't started a "personal library" yet with the new software, but i think i will with this work... it's very well written, my poet friend... thank you for sharing your talent and pieces of yourself  ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"twisted it like French ribbon" lovely imagery, Martie! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
yanno, Martie - you are so incredibly deep... where do you find these wonderful expressions? Amazing. That's what you are. Amazing! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ How .... 'fresh and lithe and new in its amazement.' How .... you ! You have such amazing talent, lady ! 'I have capsized again and again in oceans that took my breathe.' Yeah, me too ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"a personal flotation device meant for drowning souls..." shaking my head, typing and grinning...Gawd, I love that line...and you too...my dear Martie, thank you for the much needed medicine of your poetry today...me smiling now.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
It took me past the catch in my throat pulsing with a heart song, down into a safely place that enfolded my lonely wretchedness twisted it like French ribbon rippled it to clarity and brought it back like fabric tossed with bounce sweet smelling and new. ok....you have finally done.....you have taken all my words away as I do not have any worthy of this piece. Please accept a megar AWESOME and I will search for more deserving words. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I have found someone in you - whose quality of imagination I want to emulate. Everything I read of yours is so fresh and creative it takes my breath away. This poem stands unique among them all - for it captures with such poetic briliance feelings I've been unavle to express. Thank you three times |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Stupendous is the most apt word for such a great poem... particularly loved these lines here... A great and ever present reason in the still gives me strength .. I have capsized again and again in oceans that took my breathe. .. in white capped splendor negotiating with my insanity a personal flotation device meant for drowning souls. .. that enfolded my lonely wretchedness twisted it like French ribbon .. for what I'd lost I found poetry still fresh and lithe and new in its amazement. .... and in amazement, I am... astounded by the imagery, by the use of words... by your poetry... regards to you Martie, sudhir |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, This is so brilliant, it gives me goosebumps One of my hundreds of favorites You are a master at the art of expression and thought Liz |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Martie, with each read you continue to leave me speechless in total awe and I must admit slight jealously at your radiating talent. Continue to shine and dazzle us. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, as usual, Martie! Denise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Doreen--You make me blush with your generous praise...thank you so much for making my day with your words. Sunshine--Thank you so much for reading and replying so sweetly. Long John--From the deep I guess...sometimes I think too much...thankyou for the amazing..mad me almost feel that. Marge--Was that you I was holding on to, trying to reach the surface...? serenity--if my poetry helped you in any way, then I am blessed to have written if and for you to have read it...thank you sweet lady. Mark--AWESOME is a great word...and I know you mean a lot with your lack of words. Bill--Three times...I thank you for such words that make my heart happy... Sudhir--thank you sweet man for taking the time to tell me your favorite parts...You are the best! Liz--Hi...you are so sweet to me...thanks for what you say and who you are. brian--I also find your poetry to my likeing...and (jealosy) I know the feeling. Denise--thank you for your always kind words of praise and for being there. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I have capsized again and again in oceans that took my breathe. I found myself in white capped splendor negotiating with my insanity a personal flotation device meant for drowning souls. It took me past the catch in my throat pulsing with a heart song, down into a safely place that enfolded my lonely wretchedness twisted it like French ribbon rippled it to clarity and brought it back like fabric tossed with bounce sweet smelling and new. ===================== what can I possibly say -- that would be able to touch this poems grace... astonishing imagery consuming emotions perfection in poetry later-awe-me-always-gator me |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, your description of insanity is unsurpassed. Inside your head would be such a wonderful place to visit....and there are so many rooms! I love everything you do..... |
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