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Scorpio Vow
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Scorpio Vow |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England 
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You left a real bad taste in my heart! When you walked away you tore my poor world apart... Well, you locked the door and you threw away the key.. Now I'm cleaning up the mess that you made for me.. You left a real bad taste in my heart! You turned my nice plain world upside down! And then you just laughed to see my head spinning round.. All this time I thought that maybe you loved me, too.. I can't remember what it was that drew me to you.. You turned my nice plain world upside down! You laughed at me, then called me some names! You ought to know I'll beat you at your own games.. If I were you I'd try to change my old wicked ways.. I guess it's time to show you that I know how to play.. You laughed at me, then called me some names! You broke my heart, now you have to pay! You will see the part of me that I hide away.. I become invisible..you won't know I'm around.. Now you see me..now you don't.. there's never a sound.. You broke my heart, now you have to pay! You'll be the last one here that will know! You'll see that hurting me is not a smart way to go.. And if you do recover from my sting you will find.. Revenge was sweet, and in your case, that pleasure was mine.. You'll be the last one here that will know! That it's not nice.. to step on Scorpio! ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well written and angrily expressed. I hope that with writing this poem, it has helped you to heal and poor out your emotions. Ouch, poor guy, i'll be the first to agree that no one should ever anger a Scorpio, their sting is vicious. I wonder what sign he was? Take care, Melissa Honeybee < !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Melissa Honeybee... Actually this poem sprouted directly out of the past, and was fun to write, now that the situation is old history!! Sometimes we gotta look back in order to look forward! Oh, he was an unsuspecting Leo!!!! Thanks for reading...< !signature--> ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ [This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
One question-----Did he survive or did you devour his sorry _ _ _ _? Good venting....like the power in this one. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Mark... Oh, he survived, but has to live with his choices, and that's his on-going karmatic payback!!!!! Glad you liked this....took me a long time getting around to write it... ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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Zion Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 33Melbourne Australia |
why are men such fools why do we treat the fairer sex with such comtempt |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Oh...I like the "sting" in the ending!  "Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by rule."~ Samuel Butler ~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Sunni, A very real poem perhaps, that comes from you. Anger released, and passed. I always love to read your poems, and the messages they send. Bill.... |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I Liked this poem a lot....It seems I have been missing out some great poetry since I have been so busy......well I will catch up!!! A lot of emotions expressed in this one!!! Great writing!! Are you a scorpio?? I am so I was just wondering!! < !signature-->Julie [This message has been edited by JulieAnn (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've known a few Scorpions in my time, and I do know you gotta watch out for that Scorpio tail!!! Youch!!! Nicely done, Sunny1!!! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Zion....Oh, men aren't the only fools!!!! Sometimes hindsight humbles a person...lessons are learned, be it by he or she!!!! Thank you for reading! Hi Tess....Yep, just when you least expect it the stinger hits! Thank you also! Hi Bill....I used to be angry, but now I don't waste my time....another bridge burned!! Thank you, my friend... Hi Julie Ann....Yes, I am...11:59PM on Halloween Eve, (no, I won't tell you the year!!) Good to meet another Scorp...they are passionate people, so there's probably a few reading...... Thank you, and behave yourselves out there!! Hi Serenity.....I thank you for reading and your reply!! Yes, it's got a pretty wicked defense in that tail.....I'll just leave it at that!!!!!! ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Way to go scorpio girl I'm a scorpio to 6/11 and I'm not tellin the year either. Well we scorpios are usually very loyal, trusting types but ahhh yes mess with us and we have one hell of a sting ( a great way with biting words )  I think it's a defence mechanism???...LOL Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
He was a Leo eh? haha...im a Leo too, so i'll be sure to watch my manners around you scorpios! I loved the poem..and we all get what we deserve in the end! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Sunny1 What a sting! well written... regards, sudhir |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Tracie.... Ah, I knew there would be a few Scorps out there!! Yes, I agree: we are loving, trusting, dependable, and deadly in certain instances!! Thank you~~~ Hi poutprincess.... It's ok....it's only the male leo's that have to watch where they walk!! Ha!! I'm glad you liked this!! Hi Sudhir...Good to see you here..... Glad that you read this!!! ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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