Open Poetry #9 |
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After Dinner |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
As the candlelight flickers in the darkness And catches the essence of your brown skin I see myself drifting, getting lost in your eyes All while holding your hand. A fresh cool breeze blows through the window And whisks through you velvety hair You throw your head back and smile As you inhale the godly refreshing air. You speak with a voice that's so serene And it plays a blissfully sweet melody in my ear I hang onto every word that parts your smile And each seems to gesture for me to come near. I kiss you ever so gently on your scented wrist And gaze one last time into your eyes I turn and look towards the heavens As I lay my head upon you thigh. Garfield |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
So many great lines, but oh how wonderful... "I hang onto every word that parts your smile And each seems to gesture for me to come near." How fantastic to experience those feelings for another human being. -jaimie http://www.ladysixstring.com |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Thanks ladysixstring I'm really glad you liked this one. Hopefully many more will enjoy it also. Again thanks for your comments. Garfield |
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Knight Dreams Junior Member
since 2000-08-16
Posts 46Austin, Texas |
What great feelings a loved one can bring ![]() |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very romantic, ggrn3, done with grace and style. I like it... ![]() |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Balladeer & Knight Dreams Thanks for your response. I believe everyone will enjoy the next one I write. I collaborated with a friend and we were both proud of it. Everyone look for "Quiet Storm." Garfield |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Garfield Ohhhhhhhh how sensuous and loving. Very nicely done. didi |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ggrn3. . . simply superb. . . I like this one very much. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow G, this is a great piece because your thoughts flowed so well and the poem had great rhythm to it. Welcome to Passions and I wish you luck on your poetry. Nathan |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Sven & didi Thanks for your kind words. Garfield |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Nate Dogg Hey thanks for the kind words. Hey, I also like your style. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. Garfield |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent ggrn3. Enjoyed this one and welcome to Passions. ![]() |
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Auguste![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I loved this. You have SUCH a gift for writing. This was just wonderful!! Michael |
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