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What She Doesn't See.....dedicated to the romantics out there....
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What She Doesn't See.....dedicated to the romantics out there.... |
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Sunshine
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What She Doesn’t See She does not ever glimpse herself even through the radiance in your eyes she cannot perceive that she could be something of an enigmatic surprise she cannot ever envision the depths to which she makes you plummet nor would she ever accept as true she helped you reach God’s high summit she does not know that you see in her green eyes total devotion, loyalty, devoid of compromise she would not ever believe herself to belong and be the very heart’s tune of a favored song she feels fortunate just indeed that to her you fly God speed and lay beside her every night and bring to her passions light. 17 August 2000 ©Karilea Rilling Jungel |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
she does not know that you see in her green eyes total devotion, loyalty, devoid of compromise she would not ever believe herself to belong and be the very heart’s tune of a favored song .... WOW, what romanticism... melody flowing with words... ... may I add ... She does not possess the knowhow or the art of love for she is herself art, a pitcher brimful of love, crafted by the Maker with a beauty special and surreal guided by Cupid's dart itself with love's own feel .... Wonderful work, Karilea... regards, sudhir |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
she feels fortunate just indeed that to her you fly God speed and lay beside her every night and bring to her passions light. such a wonderfull piece of work, and I hope that there is that someone who fly's to you everynight......... |
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Sunshine
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Sudhir, you may add such beautiful rhetoric anytime, you only enhance...you never detract...thank you... Michael G, of course, and I would hope the same for you... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh, Sunshine...this was really beautiful, and with that special touch of yours! I enjoyed this one so very much.....what more can I say? Bear hugs coming your way!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sunshine
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Sunny, have you seen /pip/Forum33/HTML/001117.html [shamelessly promoting myself here...] I'll bet you'll get a kick out of that one... thanks for reading... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This shows the purity of your heart and the sincerity in your belief. I have come to know just a little tid bit of you through your poetry and I know there is so much more I could never see, but I want you to know that I cherish the doors you have opened. Beautifully presented and in your ever so inspiring way. Thank you much. |
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Sunshine
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Let me know, Mark, when you get too much of a good thing...and thanks! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Whoa! you put a twist in this one! I know one thing....you are getting better all the time...love these poetic angles, how they spell out the truth of life. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Sunshine I'm one of those hopeless romatics. Loved your poem. It made me reminisce about the courtship between me and my wife. Sudhir I liked the verse you added to Sunshine's poem. It added that extra dimension. Garfield |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
sorry about the misspelling of romantics. I'm sure you knew what I meant. Garfield |
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Sunshine
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ethome, so glad you enjoy being twisted {~,^}... ggrn3, welcome to passions, come on in, sit a spell, drink from the well...we always welcome [a]romatic romantics...{~,^} |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
*sighs* *sighs* again and again. Just beautiful.*sighs* |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
*sighs* *sighs* again and again. Just beautiful.*sighs* |
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Sunshine
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Kit, thanks times two! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Romantics UNITE....I think there are more of us than them...this is lovely |
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Sunshine
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Yes, Paula, you are so right...and we need a song... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hey, girl ! You talking to ME ???? Why, of course you are ! ~ R O M A N T I C ~ It's the nicest state to be in .... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
From one Romatic to another Karilea. . . this is wonderful. . . just wonderful. . .  And Paula, I hope that you're right about there being more of us than them out there!!  ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
From one Romantic to another Karilea. . . this is wonderful. . . just wonderful. . . And Paula, I hope that you're right about there being more of us than them out there!! ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Marge, of COURSE I'm talking to you! Sven, thanks ever so much, times two! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Karilea, ah, a true romantic heart here. Well she may not see it but she sure can write it. ..Just want to say hope you seen Mr. Lightfoot on City TV in Toronto the other night, supurb as always. Parker |
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Sunshine
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Parker, didn't get to see GL on TV, but will see him in person in four days...and counting!... Can't wait! and thanks for your comments! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice poem Sunshine...sometimes we need to look at ourselves through others eyes to truly get a glimpse of the person we really are. I know I am my worst critic and thanks to friends here, I've learned to look at myself a bit differently, through their eyes and for once in my life, I like the person I see |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Karilea! Denise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
sunshine--Very beautifully done!! |
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Sunshine
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We like the person you see too, Ruth! {~,^} denise, martie...thank you both! |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Ah Sunshine absolutely beautiful. And do you mean to tell me there are those out there that aren't romantics???....Hehe. Loved this. Juls |
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Sunshine
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So pleased, Juls, to see this touching so many hearts...thanks to those like you... |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
If only Sunshine; If Only! HUSG |
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Sunshine
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Ruth, indeed! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, sunshine, you have so many faces to love.... |
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Sunshine
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Oh 'Deer...  |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Sunshine, How lovely. I have selected a line from your poem that says so much about you and your inner beauty. You ARE a favored song! Love, Marcy "she would not ever believe herself to belong and be the very heart’s tune of a favored song" |
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Sunshine
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Alle, now I face a teary Tuesday...you have left me speechless... |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
this poem is truly for the romantics...i mean did u read my mind three days ago as i had this conversation with my love?????? I am in total LOVE with this poem..thank you so much for sharing this is so great "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Sunshine
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JnR4eva, you are more than welcome, and who knows, mayhap I did... |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Written so beautiful, I suspect this could apply to you as your poems are so great. People with your beauty inside do not even realize just how special they are to others. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
if you and I wer both 'looking' I assure you, you'd be #1 on my list of 'try hard' |
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Sunshine
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Susan, wasn't looking for an ego boost, but I will gladly hug you for yours...thank you... why, Mr. Yeats, were YOU looking?  |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Very beautiful. Romantic this is indeed. We should all be so lucky to have someone fly to us evry night...(even if only in our dreams.) Enjoyed this. Jenn E |
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Sunshine
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Well, shoot. Is there a color for amazement? If so, I need that color mighty quick, because I never thought to see this type of response...but I'm hugging you ALL for it! Thank you! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
She is very romantic...and writes poetry that flows with softness...this I can see...James |
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