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A Woman Like You
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A Woman Like You |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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©2000 Christopher Ward The next woman I love will be just like you Challenging my mind kind to my heart. Like you, she will smile through eyes of azure hue every time we meet. Like you, she will caress my turmoil with the wispy kiss of her sighs. Like you, she will know there is no need to speak in the comforting sanity of silence. Like you, she will hold me close in dreams and starry nights dancing shadows on the walls. Like you, she will share my aches knowing they pass in fits of inspiration. Like you, she will share in the sanctity of togetherness as one we thrive alive. Like you, she will touch me daily, without the need... to ever really touch. Unlike you, she will stay. Unlike you, she will love me ...forever. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful to read...I like the way you switched it up at the end to unlike you...James |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Superb Liz |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Christopher, may all of your wishes come true. It is so decreed. Hugs and smiles to you, I am so pleased with this...hee hee hee... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent as ever...like you!  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ok Chris, Most things about the next woman you love will be as one you are speaking to, but you say the next one will be more towards perfection perfect... what an encouraging thought... can I believe such a thing, I know not, but currently I can agree that this one is well written with your unique style... in other words you have put to paper what you want from an ideal companion... how smart...  regards, sudhir You just stood there screaming, fearing no one was listening to you They say the empty can rattles the most, the sound of your voice must soothe you ~Metallica - My Friend of Misery [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher~ Ahhhhhhhh ! The 'forever' word ... I like it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Christopher* This is beautiful, tender and......yep I'm going to say it...Sensitive  You've shown your heart in this piece...not that I doubted you had one...you just keep it under tight wraps. The loves of the past show us what love is and isn't supposed to feel like and what we want and don't want...something to be said for broken hearts I guess. When "She" come's along she'll love you like this.....and more. Beautiful writing S.C.'s~ |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And thus it is interesting to see the various interpretations of a poem. No interpretation is "wrong," but I will say that BDC came awfully close to what I was thinking when I penned it. (Don't go getting a big head now H.)James, Liz, Sharon, thank you all for sharing a sleepless night with me! S'en, hun, if only you had that power... Sudhir... thank you kind sir for your comments. I think my perfect woman will be one whom I love and am loved by. Other than that, I only have a few thousand requirements! Marge, yawp... another one of them tha'r "f" words!  H. - You, lady... LOL... Yeah, I suppose I can be sensitive, but let's try not to emphasize that point, k? Thanks all for reading and sharing! Chris [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Oh, I really loved this!!! A Brilliant read~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well na Chris, ol' boy, I wouldn'a wantin' you ta get a big head, but you done quite right here, yep, y'done OK. Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautiful Chris---she is out there somewhere...just don't settle for less. You have a vision of what you want and I hope you find her soon. |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Bittersweet! Longing for a past love, hoping for a new, with all that was and more! Great poem  "Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by rule."~ Samuel Butler ~ |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Christopher, Nicely done, Sir. A little intent, a little disillusion, and evidence of a heart willing to reach again. You have wonderful style. EWD |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I've always said that we learn from the heartache in our lives...truthful and powerful writings here my friend, I loved this. *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
definitely enjoyed this Chris...like you I like to repeat for emphasis ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Very heart felt indeed. I do beleive that saying, "Maybe we were ment to meet a few wrong people before meeting the right one, so that when we finally meet the right person, we will know how to be grateful for that gift." I really enjoyed. Jenn |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Christopher....I am sitting here crying over this one. You have outdone yourself with this. So sad but yet so beautiful and although it speaks of loss, I believe it also speaks of hope. I hope all is well with you my dear friend. ((((HUGS)))) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sometimes the "you" for whom we ache is something of a mirrored emotional image of ourselves...this is lovely, Chris. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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courtney923 Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 43 |
Beautiful! Hope you find that girl! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Dear Chris...you'll find forever within the arms of she who can keep you...You've written quite an edge to this one...the end was a twist of the heart... Good Luck my friend...you'll need it with your stubborness!! ROFLOpen arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Well crafted piece, Christopher! Corinne |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful poem Christopher! The unique flow was superb. Full of tenderness, love and anticipation ... now "go out and get her!" Best wishes, /Kit |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Beth - thank you for the time you took to reply! K - Umm, me get a big head??? Thank ya muchly!Mark - I won't... only problem is that she'd have to, to take me! Tess - Bittersweet indeed, as is much of life! Thank you for the response! EWD - Thank you, but when you called me sir, I had to lok aroudn for my dad! Krista - Exactly! And I figure that by the time I'm 90 or so, I should know exactly what kind of woman I want! Maureen - (cool name!) Thank you... sometimes I do as well (obviously ) Sometimes it works out well, and sometimes it just annoys...LOL Glad that doesn't seem the case here! RUTH!!! - Hello my friend, a face I've not seen in a while! It does perhaps seem a bit melancholic, but I think more in a wistful rather than saddened way. This does speak of hope, though with an ironic edge to it. VVERY good to see you around. Should e-mail me sometime so we can catch up! (((((HUGS))))) back!Claire - Now that m'friend is a very good point. When I was writing this, I realized that it could seem to be very selfish...which it is in a way. But I also wrote it, knowing that all the things I wrote of were all the things I too would want to share/do. Thank you lady for pointing that out! courtney923 - Me too!!! Thank you! Devina - You know... I'm not the only "stubborn" P.I.T.A. around here! Thanks lady... I think... Corine - Thank you for reading! Kit - *where is she where is she* LOL, thanks bunches! If I find her, well, I'll have found her, right? |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very well thought out Christopher. I think I know what you are saying here. I have has much the same thoughts. "there may be another but she won't be you. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi Christopher, Being on holidays during July/August, I missed some reading nites so here I am and this one found me... The content and expression you've penned in this rhyme is splendid as always... Coco |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Such a beautifull poem, I really enjoyed... I know how you feel, hope you do meet that woman of your dreams and she will meet her prince |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Jamie - Yes... I get the feeling we've both been in that same boat.  Coco - I hope you had a terrific (vacation)! Thank you for the resurrection! LM - Thank you, though I hardly think of myself as a prince! |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
You were right. And I was right. Hopefully most of the people who have responded to this are also right. I would write more, but I think I said enough already. And I think most of what I want to say has been taken from my thought and put in your words. Yes, I am not only a sheep, but cryptic in my meanings as well. (After the last response to your other poem, I thought "cryptic" might be a good idea) You know. I know. What else is there to say? .....beth "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Sighs, Christopher, I love the way you write~ Melissa~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
bittersweet...sigh |
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